A Journal by DUSTman123

Author: DUSTman123
Created: October 15, 2009 at 01:42 am
Upload Type: Journal, G (All)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
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they say one is the lonely-est number but i disagree,
any number can be the lonely-est number because no matter the amount there can always be an emptiness, a void in the hollow shell they call their life, if they have people around them to care about or who even care about them they can't be an empty shell, they are just lost can't find a way back into the light and if they truly have no one find someone be free and let the troubles melt away and fill that space that gap between you and everyone around you.

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Author Notes

this is my take on peoples lonely ness

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October 22, 2009
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Crawl before you Walk
Paraphrasing Three Dog Night, dangerous territory there lol
The running of sentences together is making it hard to understand this. It's hard to follow and the wording doesn't help. Usually when people do this, the sentences are still manageable by the word placement. You can read where one sentence ends and another begins, even if there're no punctuation. This poem falters in that respect. Dunno if you always write like this or just starting out, but you do need to improve. Find writers who write in this style and read them. Practice doesn't make perfect, but it does help.
I'm so distracted by the formatting that I've forgotten the poem itself.

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October 18, 2009
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another amazing piece i told you that you are an amazing writer get over yourself lol keep it up

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October 15, 2009
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Great writing
The facts of this poem are so true for loneliness is not in being alone but a feeling in your heart…………………..
I love your poem and it made me think.

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