A Poem by ErikTyni

Author: ErikTyni
Created: March 13, 2018 at 07:33 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Romance | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.83 Stars by 3 users with 3 comments and 21 views

Valentines revolution  

I suppose it was a revolution that made me run,

a struggle with arms and politics, my heart have had

enough with my minds endless reign of terror…


It just broke lose, a valentine's revolution, it was

you who triggered it, I adored you, you were my life

you was the one I would marry someday… someday

never came, my mind didn't want it to end like that…


I'm afraid letting my heart in charge, my mind is afraid

of letting go… Valentine's revolution bound to fail… I was

to scared of the consequences, I was scared to stop running


Valentine's revolution bound to fail, not nearly enough politics

not nearly enough weapons to defeat the genius of my mind,

it's just another failed valentine's revolution, another heartbreak…


To prevent an another massacre my mind told me to

run… just run… never look back again…never.. never..

just another failed valentine revolution attempt.. the genius

of my mind took it down… it was just not meant to be you and me

Original poem by Erik Tyni 

© ErikTyni - all rights reserved

Author Notes

A new poem from me! It doesn't happen that often but here you go!  

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Comments & Reviews ( X 2)

March 15, 2018
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I thought the use of the concept of a "Valentine's revolution" was really creative. Original and clever. I feel it would also make for a very good song : )

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March 14, 2018
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This writing piece is well written. By the choice of words, a flow of pain and sadness can be felt, coming forth from the heart. Thank you for sharing your story with us. It is a beautiful writing piece, and your voice has been heard. Love is patient, love is kind. If you are to continue your faith in love, with the loyalty of a good soldier as you are, you will be rewarded.

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March 13, 2018
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like it . It cool how you use revolution in your poem.
Love is not always easy love can be the harder thing walk away from. I would love see more of your work because its nice see someone think of love as just not so simple or black and white its sometimes gray and mess.

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