A Poem by JohnCreekmore


Author: JohnCreekmore
Created: November 27, 2017 at 12:20 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 3 users with 3 comments and 61 views

Let There Be No Mourning  

Let there be no mourning
For flags unraised,

For coins uncounted,
Lips unkissed,

For these were never
Promised.

Rather, find peace in the eye
That kept the watch,

The heart yet undespairing,

The feet that followed the path
Faithfully unto the end.

Having these, having chosen
These without regret,

Know the scales find nothing
Wanting,

And the Spirit says, Well done.


© JohnCreekmore - all rights reserved

Author Notes


Sometimes we are rewarded in secret.

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missamerica
November 30, 2017
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great
A very good subject to write about. Your style is awesome. I enjoyed this so much thank you.



(Author)
Thanks.  I try to make my lines brief and accessible.

 JohnCreekmore replied on November 30, 2017




Malpa
November 29, 2017
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Wise
John, you're making me think again. Life is not about what we achieve but what we contribute? The journey counts more than the destination? ... I sense that still more is being said here. I think I'm going to revisit this poem a few times yet. Thank you.
The succinct, unrhyming couplets work well.
applaudapplaudapplaud



(Author)
Thanks, John.  Basically, what I am saying is what matters is your attitude toward life.  Too many either give up or become embittered for one reason or another. But if you continue to keep your awareness on the best that is within you, you are better off than a gloomy man, even if he has conquered the world.

 JohnCreekmore replied on November 30, 2017




michaelgallatin
November 27, 2017
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A very interesting...
and thought-provoking poem. I much prefer to raise the flags (for a just cause of course), count the coins (I don't need to be rich but money helps) and kiss the lips (now we're at the best one). But I do suppose that in the long run of life these things don't tip the scale all that much. But I will tell you something that does and I did it as a profession for over 40 years and I do it now because it's part of me. That would be helping others less "well-off" than yourself. It not only makes me feel good, not so much prideful as happy and whole. But I firmly believe that in this often insane world we need to stand together or fall and die alone. So, perhaps well done but possibly could be improved upon!

Namaste,
Mike
applaud



(Author)
Thanks, Michael.  I'll take what praise I can get.  

 JohnCreekmore replied on November 27, 2017




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