A Poem by RamSlade

Author: RamSlade
Created: May 12, 2017 at 02:05 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Dark | Free Verse | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 6 users with 6 comments and 204 views

What to do, What to do  

I was left standing
betwixt a feeling and a truth
between the yearning and the fact
                   is a crack

I, teetering in the middle
of both sides of the canyon
I wanted to jump and
                   bridge the gap

can’t do it, can’t do it
can't cross, can't cross
to either side
                 stuck in limbo

can't make the jump
afraid everything will crash and burn
crash and burn, crash and burn
                   dammit to hell and back

don't look down, nothing to see
pick the best spot to jump
leap into the air toward the right side
                   which is right, which is right

amid the falsehoods and the true
amid the true and the less perfect
amid the aura and the action
amid the longing and the need
                 do it, do it, do it, just do it

©April 29, 2017 / Jerry Pat Bolton

© RamSlade - all rights reserved

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Comments & Reviews ( X 12)

May 15, 2017
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Life is all about...
an ongoing series of choices. Like I just chose to read some poems to build up points to post. Then I chose to skip some, only because I got tired of reading. Finally I ended by reading yours because I like what you write. All of these were small choices. There are much, much bigger ones such as my choosing to leave my family and move to another state and then choosing to return and try to rebuild. This is a fine poem about choices, figuring out which is right for you and moving on after making it!


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May 15, 2017
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Indecision is an anchor. Best to take the plunge and deal with the consequences than live with lifelong regret that you didn't.

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May 13, 2017
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We do reach a point...
.. where we stand perplexed/undecided as to which way to go which step to take, which pathway to follow for before us are so many tempting choices. We delve in hoping and praying we have picked a winner! Life is built on the experiences we go through.

I love your comparison from choices to the young lion. Very good, Kitty. Thank you for for being here.

 RamSlade replied on May 13, 2017

Sorry Kitty, I meant that firs post of mine for Sketer. You analysis of choices was very astute, my friend.

 RamSlade replied on May 13, 2017

Thanks Ram! Sometimes the ole lion jumps the wrong antelope too I guess! Lol!!!

 SketerMichaels replied on May 13, 2017

Its the genuine support we give to each other/fellow poets that bonds us as 'friends'..respecting each other's individuality. Have a glorious week end. Even when the skies are overcast we live in hope that the sun will shine tomorrow! Even when ill health and 'departures' are all around we are counted on to give encouragement but who comforts the comforter? 

 kitty replied on May 13, 2017

May 13, 2017
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Reminds me of
What it was Yogi Berra said," When you come to a fork in the road, take it." I think most of the time our instincts are correct, but then sometimes you have to restrain yourself and wait for the timing. It's kind of like a young lion that is hungry and has the drive to kill but doesn't quite know when to take off after the antelope. I like the craftsmanship of this one. The way it's cadence and form is shaped and delivered really adds to the feel you were trying to get across. It was quite masterfully done!

I love your comparison from choices to the young lion. Absolutely great, Sketer! Thank you for for being here.

 RamSlade replied on May 13, 2017

Thank you Sir!

 SketerMichaels replied on May 13, 2017

May 12, 2017
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Between a rock.....
It is impossible to say what has brought the poet to this pass, but his words are a classic description of the dilemma. He seems to be in a place where he feels he needs to make a decision, but the pros and cons of his available choices appear to be equally distributed. It looks as though he is rapidly approaching the point where he is going to have to take a shot in the dark. The last words illustrate perfectly his inner state as he stands at the edge: "do it, do it, do it, just do it". A perplexing and fascinating work. Good luck.

Awww . . . Thank you, John, for stopping by, I so appreciate it. I didn't start this poem out the way it ended up. Somehow I got to remembering when decisions were difficult to make . . . eh . . . so I went with the flow. Thanks again.

 RamSlade replied on May 12, 2017

May 12, 2017
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Placing this under the 'Dark' category, makes me think that this is quite a personal piece coming from deep within the readers mind and thoughts. Sometimes with certain minds, we have to express ourselves in a way that is a release and output of those inner feelings. A very likeable poem, and I must say, I do like the use of the word 'betwixt'. Credit for a fine piece - thanks for an intriguing read.

Thank you so very mu ch, Silverblue. Heh.Heh "Betwixt," comes from my growing up in a small little town in southern Arkansas. I am happy you approved of it, and the poem also. Thanks again,

 RamSlade replied on May 12, 2017

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