A Poem by Profanisaurus


Author: Profanisaurus
Created: December 14, 2014 at 04:46 pm
Upload Type: Poem, T (13+)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.25 Stars by 2 users with 2 comments and 201 views

032.  

I sit by the worn crater's edge
making notes on the volcano
the lava bubbles up
belching smoke

I move to the edge
to take a close up picture
tripping over jagged rock
I fall into the boiling lava

I scream as my protective suit smolders
and then begins to burn
my clothes and skin turn to ash
I can’t get to safety
the sides are too steep

The world may think that I have gone
well in a way they’re wrong
although I may be dead to you
in other’s thoughts I’ll still be living


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Comments & Reviews ( X 2)



blossomwriter
December 14, 2014
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Fully Alive...
This is so nice. Stoic in a sense of it's claim to be alive still though dead to the world, I love the first few stanzas of lava and ash burning as it closes in. This poem leaves the thought of Victories beyond all means to an end. Wow.



(Author)
Thanks for your comment.  I love it when people can see things in my poems, it gives me hope. 

 Profanisaurus replied on December 14, 2014




RamSlade
December 14, 2014
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Eh . . .
I guess everyone has other people's thinking about them as a living soul, remembering the good days when he was. Interesting poem. Didn't expect that abrupt closing. Still thinking about it.



(Author)
Thanks for you comment.  

 Profanisaurus replied on December 14, 2014


It was an honest one, wasn't trying to be a smartass or in y9ur face, nothing like that.

 RamSlade replied on December 14, 2014


(Author)
It's all good.   You took the time to read and comment and I appreciate that

 Profanisaurus replied on December 14, 2014




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