A Poem by mehall


Author: mehall
Created: September 21, 2012 at 01:32 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Personal | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 2 Stars by 2 users with 3 comments and 301 views

red brick wall  

My wrighters name is mehall.

When your in trouble ill be here,just call,

I'm no life guard,but i usaly end up, in the brawl,

Ever since i learned to walk and not crawl,

I grew up kicking a ball,

Against a red brick wall,

Now that big and tall,i

It hurts more when i fall,

I wish i was still smal,

Still kicking that ball against that red brick wall.



Last Modified: October 13, 2012 at 10:14 pm
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DQuill
September 22, 2012
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Needs severe work..the spelling needs to be fixed and the Grammar looked at



(Author)
tell me something it don't no hope that's ant u in :phoda cos needs work

 mehall replied on September 23, 2012


(Author)
tell me something it don't no hope that's ant u in :phoda cos needs server plastic surgery

 mehall replied on September 23, 2012


(Author)
might been bit in aproperate Daniel sorry just bit Irish humor need to look at profiles before i speak but difintly wounded rule out getting the eye bruws done only joking thank you have

 mehall replied on September 23, 2012




BrookeLynneMarie
September 21, 2012
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Very short and there are quite a few spelling/grammar errors. I'm sure you could do much better, Mehall.



(Author)
thanks yes i can have slight problem with spell there's a name for it but can't spell it lol using spell check now tho dislacsick think that's it thanks for your advice

 mehall replied on September 23, 2012




roger
September 21, 2012
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solid write with lots of emotion well penned nice flow keep it up



(Author)
thank you very muchthanks for understanding the emoton

 mehall replied on September 21, 2012




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