A Poem by WranglerAkin


Author: WranglerAkin
Created: February 24, 2012 at 01:32 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.37 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments and 307 views

song that came to me while in the shower  

Verse 1
i'm looking in from the outside,
looking in with eyes open wide.
... i see the pain in your eyes,
caused by all the goodbyes.
it was like your heart had died,
with the last few tears you cried.

chorus
wish i knew how to make you smile,
have not seen you do so in awhile.
would love to hear you laugh out loud,
cause that would be a wonderful sound.

Verse 2
lets go and take a walk on the beach,
leave our troubles far out of reach.
we will dance all through the night,
seiing each other in a new kind of light.
hangout together the whole next day,
no matter what anybody else may say.

chorus again
wish i knew how to make you smile,
have not seen you do so in awhile.
would love to hear you laugh out loud,
cause that would be a wonderful sound.

Verse 3
just remeber you can lean on me,
i am always here like a friend should be.
so go ahead ans dry your tears,
i will help you face your fears.
just take it one step at a time,
and you will be doing just fine.


© WranglerAkin - all rights reserved

Author Notes


i want to say a special thank you too jessica_08 and awleyezonme_3d for giving me the points to post this thank you both so much


 
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Comments & Reviews ( X 1)



holypriest
June 06, 2012
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i see the pain in your eyes,
caused by all the goodbyes.
it was like your heart had died,
with the last few tears you cried.



Oh my gosh that part is soo good. Sad as hell, but good.
I love this Wrangler!


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befordoveheart
February 29, 2012
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Like the flow!
Very good, I would like to hear it to music.



(Author)
the music to it is still in the works but it will be good when it is finished

 WranglerAkin replied on February 29, 2012




ekramunnisa
February 24, 2012
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its such a beautiful song.. But i suggest you can give it a better title...! Hope you didn't mind me saying that.. Nice write. Thanks for sharing



(Author)
it wont be the song title for long i just have not come up with a fitting title for it any suggestions

 WranglerAkin replied on February 29, 2012




Littlevoice
February 24, 2012
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Good words
Job now to find someone to make them come to life, that partner who can magic up the music that will surround the words.


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