A Poem by stephen_werdna18


Author: stephen_werdna18
Created: March 20, 2011 at 11:33 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 6 users with 6 comments and 217 views

Speechless  

I'm speechless due to various reasons
And like the changing of the seasons
My words escape, my mind is blank
But I have my reasons to be frank

I'm speechless when I see babies cry
Also when people say their goodbye
Life has its many ups and downs
No matter if you have rags or a crown

I'm speechless when I see love grow
Its care and passion overflow
Its humble beginnings and small starts
Making its way to each others' hearts

I'm speechless when I see the sun shine
Its beauty and radiance look so divine
Every creature can bask in its glow
Now and even from long ago

I'm speechless when I see people die
In wooden coffins where their bodies lie
And as the darkness fills their eyes
They leave this world with no more guise

I'm speechless due to various reasons
And like the changing of the seasons
My words escape and my heart beats fast
For I know that nothing in this world lasts


Last Modified: March 21, 2011 at 11:42 am
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BellaLuna
March 23, 2011
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Eh...
Stephen. Where has your passion gone?! I miss it! I feel like you didn't put your all into this poem, and that showed through. I don't know how to help on this one because... it almost feels like it wasn't you. I'm sorry.



(Author)
It's ok. Everyone is entitled to their own opinion. I've had this idea for a while now, and I just wanted to put it into words. Thank you for reading and commenting though. It does mean a lot.

 stephen_werdna18 replied on March 24, 2011




heav1234
March 22, 2011
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HOLY CROW
Now I am speechless STEPHEN OMG this was just far far far to good. This should win a freaking poetry award or something my goodness Stephen. I loved it and the flow and everything was perfect i mean this really stops and makes you think i mean it's like either listen or you will certainly miss a few things along the way. I loved loved this. thanks for sharing and BELIEVE me this is so being SPOTLIGHTED.


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blossomwriter
March 21, 2011
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Uplifting!
I see why this poem made the spotlight!!! It is powerfula nd moving, rythmic and worthy of praise!!! It catches the beauty of life like a snap shot!


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washedupwriter
March 21, 2011
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I really do like this, I'm going to bookmark this page so I can come back and read it again and again.

I think you have constructed a lovely flow, almost unearthly it really has this mystical feel to it. You do that well I notice, within alot of your poems you always have such strong and great soft flow.

I'm speechless when I see babies cry
Also when people say their goodbye
Life has its many ups and downs
No matter if you have rags or a crown

I really liked that stanza because it really compares people coming into our lives, then eventually, the ones who leave or "Say goodbye" It really has that great placement and indepth thought there.

I think you did a good job with this triplet, keep up the great work. SL.


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LowShoulder
March 21, 2011
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I like this poem and like your other pieces it's beautiful.Your rhyming always seems to work no matter what you are writing so well done


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LyricalMason101
March 21, 2011
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U REMIND ME
I like this a lot! i think you have a good vocalb and you remind me so much of my own writing style. (Idk who old you are so I pray im not insulting you) when I say in my more youthful days. I guess it really doesnt matter how old you are cause their are adults that cant verbalize a thought like this... butter yet think it! Their are some words that I personally would change but besides that. it had a great flow to it... wasnt hard to catch, sarcasticly i thought the title was...you had a mouthful to say what you were speechless about.KEEP PUSHING FORWARD UR ON THE RIGHT PATH



ALSO ITS FUNNY I GOT A VERY SIMULAR PROFILE PIC FOR TWITTER

 LyricalMason101 replied on March 21, 2011




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