A Poem by Gabii


Author: Gabii
Created: January 30, 2011 at 11:30 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Romance | Love | General/Other
Upload Stats: 3.5 Stars by 2 users with 3 comments and 180 views

Wallflower  

by Gabii on Sunday, 30 January 2011 at 16:09

Sip the cup and drink it well,
Its heats a kiss upon my lips
i think of you and cheeks burn red,
and heart doth swell and sing its song...

Yet in your eyes...
I appear not there,
"or so you think"
Or so i think?

I watch from corners of my eyes,
trace with my finger, outlines of smiles,
and wonder if one day those lips...
I'll touch...I'll kiss
When I'm made his...

"Wallflower,
Thats what i call you,
Your smile to me unlike another...

How i long to know your name,
to kiss those lips
not yet been claimed
To make you mine
Yes one day I'll...."

"one day I'll make you mine"

one day I'll make you mine...


Last Modified: January 30, 2011 at 11:41 am
© Gabii - all rights reserved

Author Notes


taken from me day dreaming about going to a cafe in pairs
yep im a romantic at heart so yee X)


 
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Comments & Reviews ( X 2)



Contrail
July 04, 2011
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I like your light lilting style, trying to constructively criticise ain't easy, here goes, I find the fourth line somewhat misplaced, I sense you had more to say there but possibly held back, yet the second verse is interesting, carries the first well.. The tracing outlines of smile is a great line and I think we all know what you mean by that, Wonderfull,yes it's very hard to critique a poem that so purposefully elucidates your nature, youd do well as a femme fatale! In the best possible taste of course, there I totally failed in the critique,


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LostInTheWorld
January 30, 2011
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i think im pretty much at a loss for words. this poem was absolutly amazing.THe word choice and the flow of the words was amazing. i don't think I could ever write that well.


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KiTTiArrA
January 30, 2011
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This is sweet and very romantic. I like the style of how you have written it Although I think you meant to say 'It heats a kiss upon my lips' instead of 'Its heat a kiss upon my lips' ?
Thank you for sharing I enjoyed this


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