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LOSS OF A DEAR FRIEND

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Author: elfqueena
Created: June 19, 2010 at 05:15 pm
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Sad | Non Fiction | Sad
Entry Stats: 4.25 Stars by 6 users with 6 comments 1248 views

LOSS OF A DEAR FRIEND 

I lost a friend today and really don't know why!
Maybe cause this time I didn't stand tall enough
and now I want to cry.
Never good it is to lose a friend like him !

I lost a heart that made me laugh made me sad and weep.
didn't think it was a big deal, never thought that mad he'd get.
Wish I had skipped that very poem and went on back to sleep,
but what is done is over with, cant do anything bout it.

Won't apologized for what i said it really wasn't much
just words of comfort to a fan, tried to get him to understand.
To much has happened to much to take,
don't care about the words i speak,will have to take a break.

MY heart has lost the want to write as people get so mad
and losing a friend for something like this, well its really sad.
So see you when the hurt is gone ,Oh I will be back soon,
tell then I hope my heart will mend,cause right now it's hurting bad.


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Comments & Reviews ( X 2)

MagicMJ
June 20, 2010

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Awww...
This is so sad... I hope you will stay...
I really don't know what happened but I wish things will mend between the both of you. I believe this place should be an avenue for sharing and accepting thoughts from others. Really feel sad that misunderstandings ang losing friendships are happening in this site.
I also felt sad on kassies comments... I may not know you personally but I do consider you as my friends...
Please don't leave...
My heart is aching terribly...

elfqueena
June 20, 2010
(Creator)
awe now you got me crying , lol so glad to have all the friends on here that care and I welcome you as a new friend also ,I will be okay, its just hurts when you lose a friend whom you thought was a friend for life and then find out it wasn't so , and I 'm not going to leave ,was just going to take a few days off , but now see thats impossible as I have too many lovely friends on this site to even do that so I will stay and thank you so much for caring , Sharon



carmurr
June 19, 2010

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I'm so sorry
I feel so bad, as I hate to see a friend in pain and you are my friend. Sometimes it just takes time to mend pain and sometimes it never mends at all. It just depends on how forgiving your friend is and how well he understands and loves you. I have one very close friend and there is nothing in the world that she could do to lose me as a friend, ever. Hang in there and come back soon as I know you will. Your friend, carmurr

elfqueena
June 19, 2010
(Creator)
awe thank you carmurr but he was a friend on here and i don tunderstand why he got mad at me as was only trying to help , but wont be gone just won;t be reading or reviewing for awhile as it hurts to Know I cant read his poems or talk to him again thank you for your love and same to you Sharon



emeraldeyes
June 19, 2010

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Needs work
I'm sorry for your pain. It's never easy to loose a friend. I know you are working on your style and accuracy so I'm going to make some suggestions.
lost a heart that made me laugh made me sad and weep.
didn't think it was a big deal, never thought that mad he'd get.
Wish I had skipped that very poem and went on back to sleep,
but what is done is over with, cant do anything bout it.

I lost a heart that made me laugh, made me sad and weep.
The first line is good it somply needs a comma.

didn't think it was a big deal, never thought that mad he'd get.
This line feels forced as if you were thrying to use get and the end.
Try this:
I didn't think the deal was big, never thought he'd get that mad.
Wish I had skipped that very poem and went on back to sleep.
The words went on while used in casual spoken language take away from the flow here.
Try this:
I wish I had skipped reading that poem and returned to my sound sleep.
but what is done is over with, cant do anything bout it.
But what is done is done, I'm really feeling quite bad.

ok then, this is a rewrite of your words.
I lost a heart that made me laugh, made me sad, I weep.
I didn't think the deal was big, never thought he'd get that mad.
I wish I had skipped reading that poem and returned to my sound sleep
But what is done is done my friend, I'm really feeling quite bad.

How's this in my style saying the same thing:

I lost a heart that made me laugh
made me sad, I weep.
Now I'm dealing with the aftermath
I wish I were still asleep.

I never thought he'd get that mad
That poem I should have skipped
But what is done is very sad
Our friendship now is ripped.



elfqueena
June 19, 2010
(Creator)
awe Thank you emerald, but this wasn't a poem I wish to keep long it makes me cry just reading it again, I am so grateful for your help and well keep thia just in case ever want to fix it but thank you dear one for your help. Sharon



tcolombo
June 19, 2010

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sad
remember true friends understand and stand with you

elfqueena
June 19, 2010
(Creator)
yes babe your so right and that's why it hurt so i thought I was being helpful to both but guess i guessed wrong thanks babe for your reading this and your kind words, Sharon



Truly247
June 19, 2010

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Awwww...
Sorry Sharon. I do not know what happened, nor is it my business. I do hope that the friendship can be patched up. Hurt feelings do not have to have any rhyme or reason; they just are. Sad for both sides.

*hugs*

~Truly

elfqueena
June 19, 2010
(Creator)
awe thank you truly I hope so to but i have no hope for that , but thanks a lot sharon

elfqueena
June 19, 2010
(Creator)
awe thank you truly I hope so to but i have no hope for that , but thanks a lot sharon



Kassandra
June 19, 2010

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Heartfelt
I know exactly how this feels and it is such a shame that such things happen. I do not understand why more mutual respect isn't more prevalent here and I begin to wonder why I even came back. After some heavy weeks of hectic schedule all I have seen since my return seems to be fraught with upset and tinged with sadness.

This used to be a good place to be but recently I feel rather more disillusioned than I ought. I make no apologies for speaking my mind and maintaining the belief that people have the right to say what they feel. I never will unless I change the very essence of who I am.

I hold no grudge against any of the people I have held discussion with today I say what I feel and cannot accept that friendships should be bounded by censoring of anyone's respectful thoughts.

If you leave I may just join you hun and probably for the same reasons. Right now I have too much else happening to have this place become a difficult place to be.

Yours with love
Kassie

elfqueena
June 19, 2010
(Creator)
awe babe i 'm not going to leave just stay away from reading and reviewing foe a few days and talk to myself about believeing you can say anything to a friend without them misunderstanding I knew better and still did I thought that he and I were good enough friends he would understand but I guess I was wrong . dont know why its become like this , and hate it too . wjsh it was like before but it will never be the same.but will stick it out just to see if it gets better if not then will think about leaving .hope it gets better , thank you for your reading this ,Sharon


Kassandra
June 19, 2010
BIG HUGS TO YOU BABE, You can always write me Pm if you need to talk, Yours Kassie

elfqueena
June 19, 2010
(Creator)
oh thank you babe so sweet of you but it hurts too much to talk about it right now , cant even read my poem here because makes me sad , thank you dear one, Sharon



 
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