A Poem by Clementine


Author: Clementine
Created: May 19, 2010 at 06:59 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Love | Free Verse | General/Other
Upload Stats: 3.83 Stars by 3 users with 3 comments and 169 views

Porcelain Lovers  

you and i were porcelain dolls
a long time ago
before we met

we were fragile
but we didn't know it till we dropped ourselves on the floor

we fell as one
but we each had to pick up our own peices

after that i never saw you
i went through some sort of
metamorphosis

and now only the shard inside my chest
is still made of porcelain

the rest is steel

and last week some nice fellow tried to grab that piece of me away
but i ran, and he never got it

when he was far enough behind
i took it out to have a good look at it.
and i realized

it isn't the one i've always had.
it's yours

and i knew
our pieces got scrambled
when we shattered

your fragile heart still belongs to me
and mine to you

please give it back


© Clementine - all rights reserved


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Comments & Reviews ( X 3)



emeraldeyes
May 19, 2010
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excellent
Beautifully written. I became part of your story. I loved the topsy turvey element as well



(Author)
Topsy turvey, yeah. Haha.

Thanks much. : )

 Clementine replied on May 23, 2010




bianca
May 19, 2010
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I don't really know what to say about this. It really touched me and tugged at my heart strings... maybe because I can identify with what you have depicted. Falling in love with someone for the first time, so purely, and then breaking into pieces when the relationship fell apart. The realization that some of those pieces will forever remain with that person is what is hardest to take. I really enjoyed this poem and the way you described what unfolded. Very innocent and endearing. Well done!!



(Author)
Thanks so much for taking the time to write such a lovely review! I very apreciate it very much. : )

 Clementine replied on May 23, 2010




Kiwigurl10
May 19, 2010
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quite good


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