A Poem by poetgirl94


Author: poetgirl94
Created: April 10, 2010 at 05:25 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Dark | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 3.75 Stars by 2 users with 3 comments and 330 views

Emotions  

Content...
Abandoned...
Taken...

Taken...
Loved...
Happy...

Happy...
Hurt...
Lost...

Lost...
Fades...
Disappear...

Disappear...
Anger...
Screams...

Screams...
Tears...
Depression...

Depression...
Pain...
Gone...

Forever...
Grieving...
Grave...


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Comments & Reviews



Deadserious
November 04, 2010
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I have not put a verdict as you can see. I really think it is a good start. I do like the way you have carried each last word into the next verse. I am not sure I would have punctuated it the same way but that is just what I think. I do really like your idea here though. Keep writing.


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mwpoet
April 17, 2010
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a dark death. dreamworthy
a very spiraling piece .... could be a great horror movie.


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apple17
April 10, 2010
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I guess it was ok. It was just listing the emotions. I also wrote a poem on emotions too but i gave a defination of what it feels like. You have a good start and a good idea but in my opinion, maybe you could desrcibe one of the emotions you have that you wrote in this poem and take it from there. But good start


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