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A Poem by ThunderStorm


Author: ThunderStorm
Created: March 17, 2010 at 08:56 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Romance | Romance | Romance
Upload Stats: 4.16 Stars by 3 users with 3 comments and 175 views

Eye Gazing  

Gazing the Evening sunset looking at moonlight sky.

For every Blink of my eye is like every Star.

Is orbiting the universe around the planet Earth.

For each passing daylight is loosing precious suntime.

The Galaxy is a gift from Every single planet.

Kimmy J is like a star inside of her own eye.

Ioana's gift is so spirited and she is so Amazing.

Gabstboz's eyes is a writer inside.

Thunder's eyes is True Destiny.

The Star is Dazzling is inside the Heart.

Kassandra's eyes is a Gift From Heaven.


© ThunderStorm - all rights reserved


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Comments & Reviews ( X 1)



tarantulla81
March 18, 2010
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sweet thunder and i see a great improvement.
its easier to read and you sound very poetic. good job on this one.
and thank u so much for including me


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dandelion
March 17, 2010
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Almost Good
I think that you are using the names as a reflection of a planet or star in the Galaxy. But I think it lacks a bit of describtion as to why Kimmy J is like a star inside of her own eye and Loana's gift is so spirited and so forth.
Like: Kimmy J is like a star inside of her own eye full of light, energic and shining upon us to light the way. You know why is she like a star?
If these people read the poem, they would want to know why you call them a star.


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kimmyj
March 17, 2010
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Beautiful!
I couldn't agree more! Kassandra's eyes are a gift from the Gods and I would know! After all we are in love Just kidding but such a sweet gesture and I appreciate you adding me and everyone else! You are an amazing person. You are very genuine and are going to be a Star!!! Keep up the good work! Thank you for the poem!


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