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I KNEW A GIRL


Author:   Kassandra
Created: March 07, 2010 at 12:56 pm
Entry Type: Other Type, G (All)
Category: Lyrics | Philosophy | General/Other
Entry Stats: 4.73 Stars by 23 users with 26 comments 591 views

I KNEW A GIRL 
I knew a girl .. she'd a lot to say about a lot of things

she'd open up her books ; leaves filled with wishing

She took her time and wondered bout a lot of things

realised there were things she'd been missing


she wanted to redress the wrongs and rights

and shake the loneliness of centre stage

she wanted to turn off the bright lights

and forget to tell them how she spent her days


and I wonder if she knew about it

She could never live in just one day

I wonder if she knew about it

Did she hear the call of far way


She knew there'd be so much to learn

life would pass her by too fast

the wheel of time wouldn't stop its turn

while she struggled to shape the past


and I knew a girl .. she had a lot to say on things

she'd open the books ; leaves filled with wishing

She took her time pondering all those things

never realised how much she was missing


When her mind lived far away

and her broken dreams were held in shade

that's when she had the most to say

Its when her emptiness was made


Like water as a mirror for the moon

like a window shattered from its casement

a song that found its tune

From me ... to me ... this is my statement






Kassandra 2010


Last Modified: April 04, 2010 at 09:55 pm

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Comments & Reviews ( X 40)

Dodeydee
April 11, 2010

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Bravo ++++
Again you captured me from start to finish and what an amazing finish it is...great rhyming and a lovely relaxed voice in the reading that just had the story flow down the page as smooth as silk..

Like water as a mirror for the moon
like a window shattered from its casement

I just love those two lines so much....Bravo Kass..another wonderful work from your golden pen my friend..and a pleasure to read and review.... Dodeydee.


Kassandra
April 11, 2010
(Creator)
Blushes ... speechless ! For once ! In a good way though, thank you. Kassie



DJKawayt
April 07, 2010

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Geeze Kass
THat was so fantabulous, just Bo$$taculous!!!! i love the way your flow works with your writings, they are just so just WOW. i really like this


Kassandra
April 08, 2010
(Creator)
Thanks DJ Glad you liked it so much, Yours Kass



silvernight
April 06, 2010

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Great
Amazing! Great Poem. keep up the good work.


Kassandra
April 08, 2010
(Creator)
Thank you so much for your kind words, Kass



Chillaxes
April 06, 2010

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awesome
very nice ! I loved it. this is very beautiful.

i hope to see more of this from you^^


Kassandra
April 08, 2010
(Creator)
Thank you for your kind comment, Yours Kass



rizka_12
April 06, 2010

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Remarkable!
Another masterpiece you've done, just as expected!
It's very deep. The line "When her mind lived far away
and her broken dreams were held in shade.." marked upon me.
It seems that if we don't hold firmly of our dreams,when we seem lost it can easily
be blown away by the breeze swiftly. That is why we need to believe
in our own strengths and never hesitate. This poem is very heartfelt, emotional yet powerful. It's an exceptional artwork.
That's why I'm nominating this for spotlight as well.
Great job! b^^d

~ rizka

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rizka_12
April 06, 2010

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Remarkable!
Another masterpiece you've done, just as expected!
It's very deep. The line "When her mind lived far away
and her broken dreams were held in shade.." marked upon me.
It seems that if we don't hold firmly of our dreams,when we seem lost it can easily
be blown away by the breeze swiftly. That is why we need to believe
in our own strengths and never hesitate. This poem is very heartfelt, emotional yet powerful. It's an exceptional artwork.
That's why I'm nominating this for spotlight as well.
Great job! b^^d

~ rizka


Kassandra
April 06, 2010
(Creator)
Wow Thank you for such an amazing review. Speechless, Kass xx

rizka_12
April 08, 2010
No problem Kassie^^
and sorry if it was doubled.

~ rizka



kntinaz
April 05, 2010

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Exceptional
Hard to add to previous comments as it flowed drowning me with thought. Leaving me thinging about "life passing so fast. The wheel of time wouldn't stop its turn". Great write..Bravo...Tony


Kassandra
April 05, 2010
(Creator)
Thank you so much Tony, for your thoughts on this. I am glad you felt the piece. It makes me happy when people truly get what I write and you always give so much thought to your reviews thank you, Kassie



PacificLion
April 04, 2010

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Emotional
I love the flow of your work and also the emotions it brings out in the reader.

Thank you so much for sharing your work.

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andycapped
March 31, 2010

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AVERY NICE PIECE YOU HAVE HERE. VERY TRANQUIL FEEL. THE FLOW IS SMOOTH ,BUT STRONG AND STERN. GOOD JOB. THANKS FOR SHARING. A*C*


Kassandra
March 31, 2010
(Creator)
Thank you for reviewing my work, this is one of a couple that I wrote a while back now that I dug deep for. Glad you like it



garyhamlow
March 22, 2010

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Beautiful!
What can I say - the other comments left already express my feelings for this. Thank you for your superb work.

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JonLondon
March 21, 2010

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I've often found, that when the human emotion drives the mind to a place unknown to us, it's there that we have room to run, explore..find ourselves behind the smiles we where as masks inorder for other not to worry about our state of mind...we do it to ourselves..we become lost along the way - in a world of false-hood..We forget who we are, what we want...where we were heading in the first place...as if in a panic...of trying to become someone else..just to suit their own desires....it's only when we stop, think...(reflect)...do we see - who, and what we've become...only us can change ourselves...whatever we see in the mirror...behind that image...is the real us.....I adore this poem...so honest and heartfelt..brilliant

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Desmond
March 18, 2010

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An emotional write with many good lines.
'shake the loneliness of centre stage ' being just one of them
and leaving so much for the reader to think about.

Beautifully written - excellent.

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Erato
March 14, 2010

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Nice
These lyrics reminded me of another song I heard before, Poem by Taproot, I think. It only reminded me of it because u were talking to yourself, it was almost therepuetic to you, probably. Anyways I could be wrong but no matter, that was an excellent piece.


Kassandra
March 14, 2010
(Creator)
I never heard Taproot poem until today but I like it .. thank you. I often talk to, but no longer answer, myself



DeviantWriter88
March 11, 2010

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Amazing!
It is beautiful simply different, in happiness lies sadness. Good Work!

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silverwings
March 11, 2010

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I really enjoyed this poem...I like the way you constructed it and the girl was you...well done...silver wings...

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Cat1991x
March 10, 2010

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Great! this is lovely its really emitonal i really like it! its brill
keep up the good work

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williamwk2
March 10, 2010

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Surprise
Well I figured that you were talking about yourself but I found out for sure at the end. Great write my friend, looking foward to reading some more of your work. Thank you for your reviews on my work


Kassandra
March 10, 2010
(Creator)
Thank you and It was my pleasure to review your work. I will be checking back often



midnight_pixie
March 10, 2010

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Wow...
This piece is amazing... It takes the reader on a journey, which is hard to come across.. well, for me. This is the first of yours I have read, but certainly wont be the last if this is the standard. Such a pleasure to read, it flows beautifully.


Kassandra
March 10, 2010
(Creator)
Thank you Pixie for real that means a whole lot coming from someone whose work I respect so much.



justice4all89
March 09, 2010

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I cannot say anything that has not been said before on the comments. So, I will simply have to stand and applaud. Well done.

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Idunnohereitis
March 08, 2010

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i dig it
i really like this,
probably makes great lyrics. Record it :]

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Arch2818666
March 08, 2010

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damn!
rarely have i seen lyrics on here! and these are fantastic!!! what a great story u have shared! touching and heart felt! i hope all ur work is as good as this! glad i became a fan!!!

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Rory
March 07, 2010

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Excellent
I'm glad you decided to publish your songs. Do you know of Leonard Cohen, my fellow countryman from Canada? He's a poet songwriter too. I hope that you have a way of doing musical justice to the lyrics. They might not be exactly as written when you're done, but the essence will stay. I look forward to reading more. Thanks, Botham


Kassandra
March 08, 2010
(Creator)
Hi Botham, Thank you so much for believing in me. Have never heard of Leonard Cohen is he here onsite ? No music to any of the lyrics except how I hear them in my head TBH I never even showed this to anyone else before yesterday (fear is a terrible thing and sharing innermost thought is difficult for me) Cathartic for deffo and I promise to return often, Shay xx



kev_williams
March 07, 2010

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Great job

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gomsi
March 07, 2010

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Nice
Nice indeed. well written. I enjoyed reading your . Thanks for sharing such a nice poem.

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Housejack12
March 07, 2010

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Great
Good lyrics nice rymes, looks like i gotz me some competition. Anyway that'd be great battiling it out.
Anyway i enjoyed it, i think i'll make me one now. But i'm serious really great stuff man, i read it four times, i think it's some of the best lyrics i've ever seen.
-Jack

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realistica
March 07, 2010

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nice one..

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