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A girls world

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Author: spirit99

Created: January 29, 2010 at 12:08 am

Entry Type: Poem, G (All)

Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other

Entry Stats: 4.33 Stars by 6 users with 7 comments 256 views

A girls world

There’s a girl
In a world
Who doesn’t know
How things go
What to do
Nothing in her head
Messed up
Fed up
Wanting love
Feelings
Just plain feelings
I can’t explain the tyrant
It’s after her
Help her get away!
A story of sadness
A day of madness
A friend a foe
Who will know
Something’s are right
Who’s to say wrong
On that night
To belong
She registers her heart
But it’s torn apart
She can’t get you outta her head
She needs you in her heart
She feels overwhelmed
And understated

Author Notes

I found this poem i think it is like 2 years old...

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gothpoet_2012
December 09, 2010

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PERFECT

Okay...so out of your three poems that I've read this one is surely my favorite so far! I enjoyed ''A Girl's world" because for one it was more unique than the other two. I loved the excellent choice of words in this poem. I found that the word "Pain" in my opinion in the other two was over used.

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steven743
June 14, 2010

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brillant

care to read mine comments

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apathapart
June 01, 2010

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Very Nice

When I read this, I liked it immediately because of the easy flow of the words.I had to read this again to pick up the substance, and afterward I liked the poem more, especially the last lines, "She feels overwhelmed and understated". I thought this was such a perfect use of words to describe the feeling of inadequacy that others can instill upon usl, leaving us exhausted (overwhelmed) at the same time. Thank you for sharing this with all of us here.

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dulcet
April 24, 2010

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It seems like you have great potential here but the rhythm of the poem seem to be somewhat spuratic at times, deviating from the established beat.... However you seem to capture the characteristics of life from a girls point of view as it is rather emotional and the indecisiveness seems to be a common ailment that has plagued women and men alike for ever.

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melissa
March 09, 2010

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Lol ... I can def. say that alot of us have been at this point in our life sometime or another I know I have. I like this poem alot I like the flow of it and how it is written in a story like form slowly revealing more details of a broken hearted girl as you go along! Very well done I enjoyed it!

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Savina
February 11, 2010

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Well written

This is a really nice poem, I rather enjoyed reading it.
There are many people, girls and boys alike, that can relate to this, or know someone who can.Keep up the beautiful work, I don't know much about poetry, but I do know that your very talented, and I hope you continue writing, and sharing your work with us.

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zainab
January 29, 2010

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a nice one

but I don't why but I felt something like charisma was missing still in this tiny piece

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