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The alley of madness

Author: ThunderStorm
Created: January 21, 2010 at 04:59 pm
Entry Type: Short Story, T (13+)
Category: Fantasy | Non Fiction | Humor
Entry Stats: 3.25 Stars by 2 users with 2 comments 162 views
The alley of madness 
Ioana’s story begin as a 17-year old Dark elegy was taking Karate for a living his teacher and his brother thunder wolf he was teaching Dark elegy the fine points of basic Karate but then the unthinkable happen, dark was in Rage so bad he kick trash can so bad his brother had to cancel Karate class till this Madness has to stop he was fuel by greed his brother thunder wolf was in the hospital because he twisted his ankle in 5 different places, dark has looking on when his brother got sent to the hospital because he snapped his ankle he has to spend the night there for 8 nights so Dark is in furious Rage and he blaming on himself and now he won’t get to see his brother but then Ioana give dark Elegy lift to the Hospital so the very next day Dark was now the teacher of his brother’s school Thanks Tarantula 81 for the awesome Challenge

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tarantulla81
January 22, 2010

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hi thunder. thank u for playing along on this challenge. interesting story,
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JonThomas
January 21, 2010

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Sorry
I am not going to write this review and pretend to understand what the poem was about. I mean, I understand the actions and the cause and effect elucidated in the prose, but the point of writing such a script is beyond me. To point out one discrepancy I and I guess most people have no idea what the hell the awesome challenge is. Moreover, given the overall meaninglessness of the poem I don't give a damn what any of it is about. I know I'm being severely critical here almost to the point of being crass and caustic, but I do not believe your heart was in writing this piece. In short I don't think you give a damn about it and I detest when people write shit and call it poetry. That's all I have to say.
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