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A Poem by ThunderStorm

Author: ThunderStorm
Created: December 08, 2009 at 06:59 pm
Upload Type: Poem, T (13+)  
Category: Horror | Horror | Horror
Upload Stats: 4.12 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments and 332 views

My Nightmare  

I was in school heading to my science class while my teacher was giving us today’s lecture I pass out in the middle of the floor my teacher saw me coughing up blood out of my mouth my hands was shaking. I could not even move a solid inch so my teacher put me on a table till I stop coughing up the blood then my teacher call in the principal find out what is going on then my teacher saw the cut on my head it was gushing and pouring out. So I stay in the recovery center so the blood stop gushing and pouring. The doctor was looking inside of my head I suffer a Coma for 12 days then my girl friend was so crying over me she asked the doctor if I will going be all right he told Samantha that he suffer a Coma for 12 days the doctor told Samantha I only have 12% chance to live so 11 days went by. Samantha was looking at me making sure I will be all right but then all of suddenly I woke up from my Coma Samantha was in shocked Damn where the hell Am I at Samantha told me I was at Arizona’s recovery center damn I was out for 11 ˝ days holy Fuck so the doctor was looking at my Stitches I had 45 of them then the blood of lower lip area is gone till then the doctor told me I have go home get plenty of sleep so Samantha told me I can get some sleep at her house stay tuned for part2 of my nightmare

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December 11, 2009
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That is a helluva nightmare. I liek that it is very descriptive but from a first person perspective, it adds an extra layer of depth that the focus is on the lost time and not on the ramifications of the injury, but that the scary part was indeed the lost time. Nice work here, it has a nice depth for a short piece. D

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December 10, 2009
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its a good story thunder I'll go on to check and reviewed the second part of it and I will give you a 5-stars...


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December 09, 2009
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wow freaky thunder. what a nightmare that was.
vivid descriptions.. wow

cool story man

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December 09, 2009
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wow that was very intrising it really does sound like a nightmare i was gonna say it would be nice if there was more but since thers gonna be a part 2 i guees ill just have to wait lol

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