Metaphors in Blank Spaces | FloridaGirlx09 at Writers-Network

I'll be there

Author: FloridaGirlx09

Created: October 05, 2009 at 12:04 am

Entry Type: Poem, G (All)

Category: Dark | General/Other | General/Other

Entry Stats: 4.5 Stars by 5 users with 5 comments 209 views

I'll be there

She's got the eyes of innocence
The face of an angel
The personality of a dreamer
And a smile that hides more pain
Than you can ever imagine.

She's so scared to get close to anyone
because everyone that ever said
" i'll be there"
left.

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Paralized
October 06, 2009

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That deff is a short poem that gets to the point! Love that! It's even sad!

~Paralized~

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rallyman3
October 05, 2009

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great

I love this poem. its awesome. please write more!!!!

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melissa
October 05, 2009

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Oh yes I've heard of that type of story before .. it really does suck to always be betrayed and let down but those you trusted. I like how you kept this really short, very powerful and straightforward I like that alot. I really enjoyed this one alot only thing I would change is perhaps adding a few different words/changing a few words in the last paragraph. Something that could make it alittle more severe so to speak maybe add a line or two, other than that, loved it! Great job!

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angelshorizon
October 05, 2009

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so true.....i feel like that everyday......well said....almost certain.....that one day even that girl will trust at least one person.....this is beautifully put ........i liked it.......

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thursdayonfriday
October 05, 2009

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Wow...
that peoem made me so sad for the girl...whose so beautiful and yet so sad
This girl has been let down too many times before.
The last part is the best part- "left"
the ending is as sudden as the people who leave her

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