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♥ ~~Come See -Come-saw~~ ♥

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Author: iviedoeloves

Created: June 02, 2009 at 04:25 pm

Entry Type: Poem, G (All)

Category: Love | Romance | Contemporary

Entry Stats: 4 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments 205 views

~~Come See -Come-saw~~

~~Come See -Come-saw~~

Hey wait!
I'm barely out of the gate...
So don't completely
Defeat me...
For this wieght of the world,
On my shoulders,
Is enough,
To feel like boulders;
From the rough,
And mountainous terrain.
Of some foriegn,
Arid valley plain.
It can be too much,
To live in this time.
Yet it is but such,
The greatest time to be alive!
Just cut me a little,
Slack.
In most things I excel,
But in some I do lack .
And I am just a bit bias;
In a world full of coas,
And calamity flys,
I know
Where my oasis lies;
To lay aside the doubt,
And reflect on
What it is really about;
So know for sure
this thing:
Facts flow thru the kissing.
We can't afford to ,
Be missing,
Any of them.
Illuminating with light,
The darkest enemy's den.
and the most fiersome foe ;
Narrowly flees,
In the face of
These!

iviedoe 2006

Author Notes

just tell me what you think!! and what you feel !

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Comments & Reviews

Veranika
August 15, 2010

Helpful:

I feel like you need to

revisit an old lesson - man perceives emotions differently. Therefore, you cannot expect an understanding friend in them. They are good for another stuff and get lost if barraged with drama and desire to make them understand you.

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kntinaz
June 03, 2009

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good point

i like the comparison ie: to have good tjier also must be bad, a tried and treu theme through the ages of man, positive and negative, good and evil, light and dark, full circle, great write and very good flow especially the wit of the first half. keep up the good work, Tony

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dacia
June 02, 2009

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This is a fantastic piece. I love the way you began it! Hey Wait! It completely grasped my attention, the flow is amazing, and i enjoy the way you write! good job!

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NutsTheWiseguy
June 02, 2009

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5 to 3

I really like this poem, especially the first half of it. I especially like how you point out the mental contradiction between living in such a hard time, but how lucky we are to live in such an amazing time. How even though the world seems so over-whelming, it's worth the love and life we get out of it.

Great poem, I hope to read more of your work.

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