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When heroes Fall
When the men fall to the ground Their rebel parts begin to pound.
the brothers of the ancient clan Servants of scared land at dusk they
will raise their swords To honor the fallen ones They will drink around the fire In the forest of immortality their freedom has been taken away
But they will never ever obey the king of many lies Is the devil in
Disguise at dusk they raise their swords to honor the fallen ones
they drink around the fire In the forest of Immortality When Heroes Fall
Their fight Won't be lost forever When heroes Fall Their Spirits will live
on and on When heroes fall It's the rise chosen one When heroes fall
It's the rise chosen one When heroes fall The wind blow When you hear the holy call Sorrow will strike the king he will die before the spring his castle will be burned Death is what he has earned When they return from the field all their wounds will be healed Revenge will be fulfilled Battalions of evil they have killed When heroes fall Their fight won't be lost forever When heroes fall their spirits will live on and on
when heroes fall their spirits will live on and on When heroes fall The wind will blow When you hear the holy call
Last Modified: March 18, 2010 at 07:39 pm
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now, i did not know what to make of this piece but felt
it is about freedom fighters, moreover, i was intrigue with the plot.
i'm not sure whether the characters were medevil warriors or what.
althought, i thought the writer did a superb job with dialect. unique write.
author, feel free to email me comments about this poem. thanks
Heroes live on . Honor is the spirits sword .
This one is nicely hammered out ThunderStorm . My the hammer of the gods by proud, warrior . Battle on and keep these writes scrolling with a wise clean blade in scabbard .
punctuation would have helped the flow, a very interesting peice... is it religous..."the king of many lies Is the devil" and " When you hear the holy call " our both religous statements, and here is another question is this important to you, because this looks like it was jotted down with no care in the world, im trying to not be overly mean or annoying but you did not show much thought in the presenting of this peice other than that though it was very good.
Loved this Thunderstorm, right down the freedom alley, as it was perfectly executed.
Really clever and well thought out, the metaphors were brilliant and the heroes will have their day, no doubt Sorrow will strike the king, ah yes indeed. Great write and better read, thanks for sharing, Plato