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The Wolf and the White Rose
our story begins in the lonely jungles of india a small boy named mark.
he was a bright kind gentle kid but one day a lonely wolf cub so mark.
came up to the little wolf but the wolf cub was badly injured real bad. so
mark took him in as a little puppy when mark got back he made a cast.
out of bamboo and sticky sap then the little wolf cub was extending his. paw he said thank you so much mark was shocked you can talk yes.
i can talk my name is daniel the rare white wolf and I am looking for. the
Pure White Rose so i can heal my cousin he is been poisoned by cobra.
oh that's sad after i get heal back up and i want you help me find this.
mysterious White rose so day by day night after night finally the little.
white wolf got up so the white wolf and mark look for the White Rose to
heal the white wolf's cousin so do you know where the white rose is the
wolf said nope i but do is pure white and the sap is pure and rich that's
why i need the flower so I can heal my 6 cousins but then they saw there they saw the white rose do you know how many you need Let's grab 8 of them they gather all the roses so they hurry back to the white
wolf's cave but the white Wolf's mother said you made it but I'm afraid your cousins didn't make it only one is holding on for dear life right now
Last Modified: March 18, 2010 at 07:03 pm
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Great untapped theme here. Well written. Sad but great
Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you — like music to the musician... — or else it is nothing, an empty, formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their nots and explanations.
- -F. Scott Fitzgerald
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the idea is good but the execution leaves room for improvment/ i like the title/ this has potential if only you will edit it some and rework some of the phrasing/ your style gives a hint of a youg adult looking for a voice