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Autumn of our love

Author: ThunderStorm
Created: February 26, 2009 at 05:08 pm
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Romance | Love | Drama
Entry Stats: 3.8 Stars by 5 users with 6 comments 359 views
Autumn of our love 
the years have seen many autumns pass. In the seasons our hearts once knew. the richness of the Scarlet leaves. Reveals special times with you. the hand of time keeps ticking on as down the road we go.
Our hearts locked in a bond of love as we walk in fallen snow.
I saw your soul light up the sky. and your heart began to sing as tiny arms. reached out to you in the summer is gone and autumn is here.
again It's time to stop and reminiscence about our lives. have been A few more lines now trace your face Soft Shadows veil the wall. our children have since gone away and faded leaves to fall but our love. has known few changes with the passing days Expect to grow still stronger.
In so many ways Those vows we took so long ago to Always have and
hold Have our lives together lacing Silver with Gold Thunder+courtney=gothic couple,


Last Modified: March 18, 2010 at 06:58 pm

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Comments & Reviews ( X 2)

elphie
May 26, 2012

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Love the write . I can truly feel the emotion within your words.
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coenraadvliet
June 11, 2009

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Up from the page
Like always. You know exactly how to get the story across and get the words to jump up from the page and draw a picture

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you — like music to the musician... — or else it is nothing, an empty, formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their nots and explanations.
- -F. Scott Fitzgerald

(Remember to return the favour and give a review back and be brutally honest. Nothing to learn from fake smiles)
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Ryiah
February 27, 2009

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WoW!!
Hi! Hey, I like your poem! Just by reading the first line of your poem, I'm capture by it already! Do you know how hard it is to just get the first line of a poem started for me, or perhaps just not my first line, but the first 2 words! Keep on the good work!
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SheaRyhai
February 26, 2009

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I know not all poetry needs to be in short lines and stanza's but that might have helped this piece. Also use of periods instead of commas between "sing as tiny arms, reached out to you". "In the summer (that ) is gone and the autumn (that) is here (flows better). Unsure of use of capitalization in the middle of a sentence but not at the beginning. Formatting needs help. The read was good but it was a struggle to find.
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blackviolets
February 26, 2009

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Not a bad write.
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cherrygurl6289
February 26, 2009

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well idk about this 1
well i think that i reallly can t give a straight opinion about this
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