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♥ Vanilla Ice cream ♥


Author:   iviedoeloves
Created: March 13, 2005 at 11:56 pm
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Sad | General/Other | General/Other
Entry Stats: 4.5 Stars by 4 users with 5 comments 497 views

Vanilla Ice cream 
Vanilla Ice Cream

I believe in long good-byes
Vanilla ice cream
And torrid crys
Ibelieve this parting of ours
Is smarting my heart so
That I'm seeing stars
This is a bad conck on the head
So that I just want to lie here in bed
There's nothig really to get up for
Unless that's you
Knocking on my door
Unless that's you
Calling on the phone
I don't want to talk to anyone else
I'd rather be alone
This parting of ours
Is proving to be tough
We didn't say good-bye
Quite long enough
And eating this
Vanilla ice cream alone
Can really be tough
It ony reminds me
How far away you are
Like a bad conck on the head
It's making me see stars

 
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Comments & Reviews
March 14, 2005

This is cute work, still I had a hard time following the flow. You are getting better and better just keep that pen a burning.
Take Care

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BobQuinn
March 14, 2005

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Depressed people can gain a lot of weight, some eat ice cream, some drink beer. Some store it on the belly. some on the rear. I was glad to be rid of the bitch but smarted like you, at being rejected. But I'm over it now, and seventy pounds heavier!

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James765
March 14, 2005

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Rich as vanilla ice cream with hidden meaning. nice job

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TempestOfNature
March 14, 2005

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VIC..what a good favlor to eat and what an amazing poem for a treat...thanks for sharing Ivie.

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March 13, 2005

Great work!

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