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♥ A Poem by iviedoeloves ♥

Author: PRO iviedoeloves
Created: December 10, 2008 at 04:55 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Sad | Personal | Free Verse
Upload Stats: 4 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments and 462 views

White Hollow Eyes  

white hollow eyes

i waited intently for your
reaction as i bled blue
on white hollow eyes
no one came to answer
my cry of love and pain
in white hollow eyes
i am taken aback by the
lack of response i feel
lonely in white hollow eyes
this may not be the place
for me because all i can
see are white hollow eyes

iviedoe 2008

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October 20, 2012
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A good read.
This poem portrays that someone has went thru a severe letdown in their life. At least thats what I get out of it. But that is also what I like bout most poetry - you get to draw your on conclusion, so to speak.

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June 24, 2011
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This was pretty good, but I think you repeat White Hollow Eyes a bit too much. You may want to separate this into a few stanzas instead of one big chunk of writing.

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January 22, 2009
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i do not particularly like free verse, but this one deserves my praise. good job, and keep up the good work!

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January 01, 2009
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Well said
Reminds me of being married...brrrrrr!

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