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♥ A Poem by iviedoeloves ♥

Author: PRO iviedoeloves
Created: August 18, 2006 at 05:54 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 5 Stars by 3 users with 4 comments and 391 views

~~~Want of Opportunity~~~  

To Ask and Expect Your Help~~~

If I am the girl you want,
Please look me the eyes.
When you talk your talk to me,
Don't keep it under disguise.

Bad and ugly is this world,
Enough for the both of us two.
Needing to comlpetely coheise,
To make our mark and hear our cue.

See, some are happy in clogged cogs,
That move forward from rust no more.
But I am in great want of opportunity;
Like a wide open french garden door.

Yes indeed, I have a partial vision within,
My lack of brawn keeps me from the whole.
Slack of co-oporation in completion and maintainence;
Keeps your heart from the spirit and the soul.

What I want and need so very much,
Is to make these digs into a cozy nest.
And I'm going to ask and expect your help;
Because comimg together is one of life's tests.

On top of all of this,On the lighter side
We need a camera very much
It's beneficial to see how far we've come ,
To document our progresss and such.

A summary of checks and balances,
And how much we can accomplish together.
Pictures of our Karma colladeral;
As to how far we can go into forever.

I believe that this is when,
I'll be seeing you look into my eyes
You will really be able to begin
To shed the shifty soul disguise

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August 23, 2006
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Beautiful piece. Full of emotions and beauty. You have a wonderful way of expressing yourself, words flow so smoothly and you paint such vivid images when you write.

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August 21, 2006
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Beautiful piece, so full of emotion and imagery. I love this line "To shed the shifty soul disguise". It is so true - everyone seems to wear masks in love - to hide our real selves in order to impress and we forgot who we are in the process.

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August 20, 2006
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Wow this was amazing! Your awesome!

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August 18, 2006
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I entered the site with your this poem was on top in latest poems list, I read it and added my poem and clicked to my critiques and wwwwowwww it is you. Yes we must fight the illness of your own persons and give them strength that human must not feel alone. we must be with it in its fight. your this poem excellant, at present i am in cafe. I joined your fan club wiht this rich poem containing tich literature. will read your poem later on. sanjay

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