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A Poem by lostsouls123

Author: lostsouls123
Created: November 14, 2016 at 09:43 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Non Fiction | Love | Free Verse
Upload Stats: 1 comments and 167 views

Forget Me Not

One day you will forget me.
My name will be a foreign word on your lips despite the many times you had said it with glee
The memories we had once shared a distant dream
Our joyful laughter now simple echoes caught in the wind
You will find comfort in someone else;
Whispering the secrets you would have once told me
I could tell you the moment you started slipping from my fingers,
When the light started fleeting from your eyes
If I would have known we would have had last words I would have recorded every hello and
would have never said goodbye
Because now I have to close my eyes to see your smile or look at the stars to see your eyes
Cover my ears so that the only voice I heard was yours, stand in the middle of a room so that your touch would last forever but who would have known that forever would have been that short.
Even now, friend or foe, I don't think I could ever love you more.
And despite the fact that I was easy to forget,
You will always be a constant in my head.

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November 26, 2016
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I'm sure that the fates will provide someone better for the writer, however certain she may feel right now that her heart will always belong to the person who just slipped through her fingers.
There's seven billion people on the planet which equates to plenty to choose from.
Oh, you wanted crit didn't you... "echoes in the wind" "light fleeting from eyes" are too cliche --when you're feeling your words, try & come up with something unique to you -- otherwise it sounds like it's all been said before (which it mostly has,btw)
I know it's free verse but if you tailor your line lengths a tad it'll generate a better flow. Read this aloud & you'll get what I mean. << that' s just MHO of course.
You write with refreshing honesty.

Best ~ Abra

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