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A Poem by RobertRonnow

Author: RobertRonnow
Created: November 04, 2015 at 07:31 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Free Verse | Writing | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4 Stars by 1 users with 1 comments and 227 views

Jet, cracked paint, tea  

The clouds take a little blue from the sky
beyond, how beautiful the weather makes life
seem. The sky is where the soul goes when
the mind runs out of destinations. We love
the mountains because that's where the earth
meets the sky. If you just watch the sky
an hour each day, lie back in the grass,
you'll never be ill. When it rains your face
becomes a holy bowl. Once I was a beggar, no
cares, by railroad tracks. They too disappeared
into the sky. A small town you could hold in your fist
on the prairie. A big city easy to hold in your mind
when you're in the sky. The clouds take a little blue
from the sky. The sky takes a little blue from your soul. . .

© RobertRonnow - all rights reserved

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January 19, 2016
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Beautiful, Reverent
I think this poem is well structured, and delivers a solid theme throughout, in addition to having a few lines that could stand alone. It's a mark of a fine piece of writing to sew together these stand alone lines with grace. Even visually, the longer lines and block like feel lend itself to the earthy, grounded sentiment of the poem. My only gripe is with the ellipses at the end. A last line of this quality deserves to be stated boldly, and without a hint of parts missing or things to come as the "..." implies. It is grounded and sure, so let it be!

Overall, I love this poem. It's very strong, reverent and well stated. Great work.

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