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A Poem by RobertRonnow


Author: RobertRonnow
Created: October 26, 2015 at 09:30 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Free Verse | Writing | General/Other
Upload Stats: 5 Stars by 1 users with 1 comments and 119 views

Something  

Something created. Does the creator think ahead
or spill a storm. Rain happens. We supply the
reasons. Evaporation of water collecting over
huge expanses, condensed and pushed as clouds
over the land. We say it makes us sad or depressed.
We want to cry.

You describe the America you know and if you
are ashamed of yourself for what you see, you lie.
Or don't look. Loud noises of automobiles and
fumes. Today in Riverside Park, leaning on a rail,
the dead leaves and snow reminded me how far
from nature and life I am. The snow blew
in from the west. People passed in a smooth
slow line in front of me. Dogs trailing one
another. People hiding until crises bring them
out. Their dog smells another dog between the legs.
The master runs over to stop him. Maybe he
thinks they're going to fight. Doesn't want his
big German shepherd to hurt her dachshund.

Guy runs past in gray sweats on his tip-toes.
Glances at me. Another passes in blue sweats. Looks
longer. They think I'm a mugger. They are not
sexually attracted. I'm an opponent. I want something
they have. I look surly. Why aren't I out
running, disciplining myself, making myself healthy,
doing something. What brings you out here. You're not
doing anything but watching us and staring at the ground.

            Walking down Broadway I realized I've never lived here and still don't. Two women window shopping is strange to me. They talk about the clothes. They are friends. I slow down, I don't feel so cold. Stroll, looking at people is like a sunny day and it's a carnival. Streets different in different weather. Rainy nights are good. Cold rainy nights. Bars filled and warm. Streets empty and cold. People pass and look as members of a fraternity. They need someone and don't hide it. They will try anyone out for one night. They have tea together. They go for a drink in some neutral place. They go straight to bed in the dark. They can't see the face.


Last Modified: October 27, 2015 at 07:15 am
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JohnCreekmore
October 26, 2015
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Consciousness
This poem is written in something like a stream of consciousness technique. It appears to be a collection of the random thoughts of a New Yorker as he walks the streets of his city. A stream of images passes before him and he comments on them mentally, moving quickly from one to the next. Perhaps the key to the poem lies in the first verse: "Something created. Does the creator think ahead or spill a storm." That is exactly what the poet is doing here; creating by spilling a storm of perceptions. As the process demonstrated here mirrors the way most of us think, perhaps the poet is saying our world is the mirror of our thoughts. Another line may also be revelatory: "You describe the America you know and if you are ashamed of yourself for what you see, you lie." Most of the time we are not ashamed of our reactions to our world, whether society says we should be or not. There are many lines that reflect similar themes. There is no linear progression of action, but the messages, taken as a whole, seem to say that we all feel like outsiders viewing an unfolding story and commenting, sometimes sourly, on it, not realizing that we are creating the story as we watch it. This is an unusual, imaginative piece of work. Well done.
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