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DEW DROPPED STRAWBERRIES

Author: elfqueena
Created: April 26, 2012 at 02:54 pm
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Despair | Heartbreak | Personal
Entry Stats: 4.66 Stars by 6 users with 6 comments 106 views
DEW DROPPED STRAWBERRIES 

Whispering winds
sun drop days
how have you been
since I went away.

Dew dipped strawberry's
covered in wine
what was the matter
did you forget me this time.

Honey whipped clover
with honey sweet wine
did it seem forever
when you left, your were sublime.

Roses are red and you made your bed
and now your alone instead.
Sugar is sweet but your too bitter
and now I am so in a flitter.


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Comments & Reviews ( X 9)

DeviantWriter88
May 24, 2012

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In Strength -
- there's Sadness

Slowly these words of yours captivate a melancholic sadness,
These eyes are crying tears of silence, on the skin is felt dryness,
These lips scream silent screams but there is only deafness,
for now I'll be dwelling in the tearful laughter of this madness,

- love your beautiful poem.
 Additional Comments (1)

elfqueena
December 01, 2012
(Creator) 		awe i wrote this after I had my stroke lol hope it was good . hugs Sharon



Celtic
April 26, 2012

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Lovely poem. Fun to read and it flows so well.
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elfqueena
April 26, 2012
(Creator) 		thank you so much have a good day ,Elfqueena



paSSionsburn
April 26, 2012

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spotlight!
sharon you have penned this to absolute perfection. i love it..every beautiful line! Spotlight!! Booksy
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elfqueena
April 26, 2012
(Creator) 		awe thank you booksi and i enjoy your to when I get to read them hugs and loves, Sharon



oliverc
April 26, 2012

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Great use of natures sweets, very sensual is parts, enjoyed it.
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elfqueena
April 26, 2012
(Creator) 		awe tyhank you too much , hugs Elfqueena



JeffM
April 26, 2012

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very simple write that flowed nicely, i liked it alot..............
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elfqueena
April 26, 2012
(Creator) 		thank you sweetie,Elfqueean



user22767
April 26, 2012

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The rythme is so good and the way you incorporate the strawberrys- it gives it an appeal that is alluring.Nicely done!
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elfqueena
April 26, 2012
(Creator) 		AWE thank you so much your to kind, hugs Sharon



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