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A Poem by elfqueena

Author: elfqueena
Created: April 26, 2012 at 01:17 pm
Upload Type: Poem, M (16+)  
Category: Heartbreak | Sad | Non Fiction
Upload Stats: 5 Stars by 3 users with 3 comments and 124 views


You hold me in your arms real tight
and make sweet love to me
I see the tear drops in your eyes
and can't believe I see
the anger toward my face
that aimed just at me
and suddenly I realize
that maybe it wasn't for me to see.
But even though you hid it quick
it wasn't hard to see
What you really thought of me
as I bent down on bended knees.

You were my everything
you meant the world to me
but now I have nothing
because you'll leave you see.
I became nothing when you left me hi and dry
I became nothing as tears fell, and I began to cry
you became my everything with the passing of time.
with out you I am nothing,
with out you I have nothing
but without you my life if just beginning
but how will I ever be free without you in it.

Last Modified: April 26, 2012 at 02:57 pm
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April 26, 2012
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amazing write, I felt raw emotion, great job keeep it up

awe thank you so much it was hard to write but now maybe I can sleep lol hugs ,Elfqueena

 elfqueena replied on April 26, 2012

April 26, 2012
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Wow that is deep but I really liked it. It reminded me so much of my frist friend whom I loved as a brother. You could say we were very much like twins even though we aren't. But anyways, 5 stars

thank you so much I appreciale that and hope you have a nice day

 elfqueena replied on April 26, 2012

April 26, 2012
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I really like the writing scheme.It is a deep sensual piece...Nicely done!

awe thank you so much sweetie hugs Sharon

 elfqueena replied on April 26, 2012

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