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A Poem by lalipenz



Author: lalipenz
Created: April 11, 2012 at 07:06 am
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Foil Moon  

From what I gather
you may not invite
the moon to a solo
act of yours, peeved
with her absence
all through practice
and you were left
to be inspired
by a foil moon
hanging by the grace
of a string from
the iron bar
that feeds across
your terrace like
a predator
wearing a dull
oxide coat kissing
rain in drizzles


by Nikhil Nath


© lalipenz - all rights reserved

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Comments & Reviews ( X 7)



Peace-spirit
May 09, 2012
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beautiful and alluring
a most talented piece of writing


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elphie
April 27, 2012
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Love the imagery . Great write . You are a true talent my friend. Keep on writing and never stop.



(Author)
thank you for your words of encouragement butterfly lady

 lalipenz replied on April 28, 2012


You are very welcome

  elphie replied on April 28, 2012




Caroline
April 20, 2012
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Spectacular
wow Lali..this is such a imagery fest for my senses and my mind's eye..This invokes all kinds of images and interpretations..I love the idea of a foil moon..the moon is such a beautiful subject matter anyway, and the way you have done this piece is marvelous. SL! BW



(Author)
thank you for your kind words just too busy to sit down to work on the site but will be back soon miss you all

 lalipenz replied on April 25, 2012




dazedforever
April 20, 2012
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Wow....a fascinating write Lali. Loved the whole concept, its quite mysterious too.. 'kissing the rain in drizzles' only you could conjure up an image like that. Great work as always. Sl.



(Author)
thank you mumbaikar for your kind words

 lalipenz replied on April 20, 2012




philip19
April 18, 2012
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I see a wooden veranda and a pole sticking out and green string holding a silver foil moon hastily painted, hanging down and I sense dissapointment-spotlight-sir.



(Author)
thank you for your kind words

 lalipenz replied on April 19, 2012




SanExpeditus
April 17, 2012
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Excellent wording
...'and all the world's a stage!'.... you bowl me over with your genius wordplay, my wonderful Poet! Such disappointment in this poem, the lack of audience, approval, moonlight, attention... you create whole scenes with your language, stage settings, and yet everything seems to take place simply inside ones own head. Brilliant thinking woven into super poetry...spotlight!



(Author)
thank you so much for your kind words just too busy to drop by thank you again

 lalipenz replied on April 19, 2012


You're so welcome, dearest Poet, I hope you soon have the chance to breathe and indulge in the things you love.

 SanExpeditus replied on April 19, 2012




CloudNumber9
April 11, 2012
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Intriguing write my friend - some excellent description used throughout. I liked this one that's for sure.



(Author)
thank you for your kind words sorry for the delay in responding as I got busy

 lalipenz replied on April 19, 2012






      

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