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Foil Moon



Author: lalipenz
Created: April 11, 2012 at 07:06 am
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Entry Stats: 5 Stars by 7 users with 7 comments 211 views

Foil Moon 
From what I gather
you may not invite
the moon to a solo
act of yours, peeved
with her absence
all through practice
and you were left
to be inspired
by a foil moon
hanging by the grace
of a string from
the iron bar
that feeds across
your terrace like
a predator
wearing a dull
oxide coat kissing
rain in drizzles


by Nikhil Nath


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Comments & Reviews ( X 7)

Peace-spirit
May 09, 2012

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beautiful and alluring
a most talented piece of writing

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elphie
April 27, 2012

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Love the imagery . Great write . You are a true talent my friend. Keep on writing and never stop.


lalipenz
April 28, 2012
(Creator)
thank you for your words of encouragement butterfly lady


elphie
April 28, 2012
You are very welcome



Caroline
April 20, 2012

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Spectacular
wow Lali..this is such a imagery fest for my senses and my mind's eye..This invokes all kinds of images and interpretations..I love the idea of a foil moon..the moon is such a beautiful subject matter anyway, and the way you have done this piece is marvelous. SL! BW


lalipenz
April 25, 2012
(Creator)
thank you for your kind words just too busy to sit down to work on the site but will be back soon miss you all



dazedforever
April 20, 2012

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Wow....a fascinating write Lali. Loved the whole concept, its quite mysterious too.. 'kissing the rain in drizzles' only you could conjure up an image like that. Great work as always. Sl.


lalipenz
April 20, 2012
(Creator)
thank you mumbaikar for your kind words



philip19
April 18, 2012

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I see a wooden veranda and a pole sticking out and green string holding a silver foil moon hastily painted, hanging down and I sense dissapointment-spotlight-sir.


lalipenz
April 19, 2012
(Creator)
thank you for your kind words



SanExpeditus
April 17, 2012

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Excellent wording
...'and all the world's a stage!'.... you bowl me over with your genius wordplay, my wonderful Poet! Such disappointment in this poem, the lack of audience, approval, moonlight, attention... you create whole scenes with your language, stage settings, and yet everything seems to take place simply inside ones own head. Brilliant thinking woven into super poetry...spotlight!


lalipenz
April 19, 2012
(Creator)
thank you so much for your kind words just too busy to drop by thank you again


SanExpeditus
April 19, 2012
You're so welcome, dearest Poet, I hope you soon have the chance to breathe and indulge in the things you love.



CloudNumber9
April 11, 2012

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Intriguing write my friend - some excellent description used throughout. I liked this one that's for sure.


lalipenz
April 19, 2012
(Creator)
thank you for your kind words sorry for the delay in responding as I got busy






      

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