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Women at work


Author: lalipenz
Created: April 09, 2012 at 07:20 am
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Entry Stats: 4.16 Stars by 3 users with 4 comments 142 views
Women at work 
Your face
has a storm

painted on it
when asked

you quipped
"I'm hungry"

You hog
two egg rolls

yet, the tornado
never leaves

your face
the whole evening

What's bugging
you now?"

"My boss.
he proposed a night out"


by Nikhil Nath


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elphie
April 27, 2012

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Especially love the line" yet, the tornado never leaves" You are beyond creative my friend. Keep on writing . You are true talent.
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LoveLoi20
April 10, 2012

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Oh, man. Woman need to eat when she is hungry. He is not the kind of boss. Well, boss wants her to finish the work and then go home and eat. Nice work. -Loi-
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lalipenz
April 11, 2012
(Creator) 		thank you for your kind words while I let the reader guess this poem is about how a boss makes an indecent proposal


LoveLoi20
April 11, 2012 		"an indecent proposal"? do you mean that he is faking to propose his female employee?


lalipenz
April 20, 2012
(Creator) 		yep but not faking demanding



gstrange3
April 10, 2012

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Good
Hummmm. Interesting to read with a surprise ending. Who would have thought. More please.
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lalipenz
April 11, 2012
(Creator) 		thank you for your kind words



DemeraraLady
April 09, 2012

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it how you felt.
remember to clock out at 3 that all i can say about this piece
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lalipenz
April 11, 2012
(Creator) 		thank you for your kind words while I let the reader guess this poem is about how a boss makes an indecent proposal






      

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