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A Poem by lalipenz



Author: lalipenz
Created: April 09, 2012 at 07:20 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
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Upload Stats: 4.16 Stars by 3 users with 4 comments and 178 views

Women at work  

Your face
has a storm

painted on it
when asked

you quipped
"I'm hungry"

You hog
two egg rolls

yet, the tornado
never leaves

your face
the whole evening

What's bugging
you now?"

"My boss.
he proposed a night out"


by Nikhil Nath


© lalipenz - all rights reserved

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elphie
April 27, 2012
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Especially love the line" yet, the tornado never leaves" You are beyond creative my friend. Keep on writing . You are true talent.


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LoveLoi20
April 10, 2012
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Oh, man. Woman need to eat when she is hungry. He is not the kind of boss. Well, boss wants her to finish the work and then go home and eat. Nice work. -Loi-



(Author)
thank you for your kind words while I let the reader guess this poem is about how a boss makes an indecent proposal

 lalipenz replied on April 11, 2012


"an indecent proposal"? do you mean that he is faking to propose his female employee?

 LoveLoi20 replied on April 11, 2012


(Author)
yep but not faking demanding

 lalipenz replied on April 20, 2012




gstrange3
April 10, 2012
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Good
Hummmm. Interesting to read with a surprise ending. Who would have thought. More please.



(Author)
thank you for your kind words

 lalipenz replied on April 11, 2012




DemeraraLady
April 09, 2012
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it how you felt.
remember to clock out at 3 that all i can say about this piece



(Author)
thank you for your kind words while I let the reader guess this poem is about how a boss makes an indecent proposal

 lalipenz replied on April 11, 2012






      

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