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My Dad's Visit



Author: cjaymac
Created: August 20, 2011 at 01:47 am
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Love | Spiritual | General/Other
Entry Stats: 5 Stars by 5 users with 6 comments 172 views

My Dad's Visit 
My Dad's Visit

Standing in a fiery white chariot,
he streaks through the heavenly night sky!
Each time I see a shooting star,
I imagine the same thing,
and wave to my father!
His image I see;
I hear his voice;
feel his touch,
and his
Love!
Tears
of joy;
of sadness;
Fond memories
of a gentle man,
a father, and a friend!
I love you dad, and miss you.
I'm glad I saw you passing by,
and I'll catch up with you the next time,
when your shooting star streaks across the sky!


Author Notes
Reversed Double Ethere. It combines the reversed ethere and the standard ethere and is twenty lines in length. It begins and ends with ten syllables. Lines ten and eleven contain one syllable each.


 

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Comments & Reviews ( X 8)

JonArno
December 30, 2011

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What a beautiful poem CJ...I was moved by your loving tribute to your father. I bet he says the same thing as he approaches you. Again...beautiful...I enjoyed this very much. Best regards, Jon


cjaymac
January 07, 2012
(Creator)
Thank for the beautiful thought, Jon! It makes this piece even more special for me! One day, he and I will probably have a good laugh about it! My sincere appreciation and respect for your beautiful comments and kind words! God Bless. CJ.



philip19
December 22, 2011

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Very clever write and a great tribute to your father-love your imagination of your father as a shooting star in his chariot streaking across the sky.


cjaymac
January 07, 2012
(Creator)
Thank you, philip! The 'imagination' comes from my grandmother. When she was alive she use to talk about my grandfather in the same way. So I really can't take all the credit for that. Sincerely appreciate your comments and kind words! God Bless. CJ.



Uranusisfunny
December 22, 2011

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beautiful
not familiar with this form of poetry, seems a little complicated. lovely poem, very touching. nice writing.


cjaymac
January 05, 2012
(Creator)
Thank you, Uranusisfunny! The forms construction probably is, but seeing that rhyme is not necessary you need only concentrate on the thought flow. Sincerely appreciate and respect your comments and kind words! God Bless. CJ.



awoken
August 20, 2011

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Love poems
that are well written of great sentiment. good workand creatively layed out


cjaymac
August 30, 2011
(Creator)
Thank you so much, awoken! I do sincerely appreciate and respect your kind words and comments! God bless, CJ.



lalipenz
August 20, 2011

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5
I saw the arrangement as a graphic a chalice rising in toast to your dad lovely poem well done


cjaymac
August 30, 2011
(Creator)
Wow! Thank you so much for allowing me to look at it that way, lalipenz! It means a lot more to me now. Sincerely appreciate and respect your kind words and opinion, Thank you again! God bless, CJ.


lalipenz
August 30, 2011
u r welcome been busy ?


cjaymac
December 21, 2011
(Creator)
Had a bit of a health scare, but things are on the improve.


lalipenz
December 22, 2011
good and cheers for the season



user20962
August 20, 2011

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Oh cj
This is so very beautiful! I salute this piece for grabbing at my heartstrings Wonderful. Thank you Woo ;0))


cjaymac
August 30, 2011
(Creator)
Thank you, my dear Woo, for this lovely review, and for the points! I didn't get the chance to tell him I loved him and to say goodbye, so this is my way of letting him know. He taught me respect, and for that I can thank him for who I am today. As always, I sincerely appreciate and respect your kind words and opinion! God bless, CJ.

August 30, 2011 Dear cj it is as always a pleasure and what a lovely way to tell your father!
Woo






      

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