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In The Moonlight
Love me amidst the baskets of blooming hibiscus.
Sing melodies to me with lyrical charms.
Fulfill my deepest of wishes.
Bathe me in the sensuality of your arms.
Cradle me tight under blankets of rapture.
Shimmers of gold under your feet.
Like a rose's essence my heart you have captured.
Tonight by moonlight we shall meet.
Moon dust dances around your sweet face.
Your green eyes reflect the stars.
Your strong hands you place around my waist.
My love we shall never part.
Tantalize me with potions
of your poetic verses.
I smell the perfume of our loving devotion.
Your song through my mind disperses.
The moon follows your brilliance
sparkles illuminate your skin.
Your words encrypted into the sky by millions.
To mysterious places my heart you send.
Let's dance under glow of moon's lamp.
While fireflies serve as our candles.
Upon my soul is your love stamped.
With eloquent grace our love you handle.
I wrote this piece i hopes of capturing pure...sweet and exquisite romance. What could be more glorious than beng inside the arms of the one whom you love undereath te moon and stars while being intoxicated by the perfume o fresh flowers, and by the loving verses of your sweetheart? Thank you for stopping by to read. your friend, BW44
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I loved the lyrical quality of this piece. The sweetness of the details that you portrayed here overflowed and it sent out moments of pure bliss and romance. Your choice of words indeed captured the sense of true love and the even flow and rhythm only brought this piece to life. Well done! It deserves it's place in the spotlight
There you go again...My mind enraptured such an awesome conveyance of feelling so our head is filled the imagery of a moonlit night and a lifting of ones heart. Enjoyed throughout. A very great write and a spotlight. Keep that ink of your flowing. Your friend and fan, Tony
It's awesome. Very concrete imagery of a very abstract concept; love. you just have a way with words, and your pacing is good I just wasn't sure about the juxtaposition between the 4th and 5th stanzas. Great Job!
All of your Romance and erotic poems are wonderful. When we are in love then we feel the love with all of our senses. We can taste, feel, see, hear, and smell the love when we are in love. This is very romantic my friend. Are you this romantic as a person too or just in the world of words, wink. haha.
I am Jealous. Maybe I fell behind. He is a lucky son of a Gun. haha. I am sure he is telling you the truth. If a creation can make guys melt then I can only guess what happens when the creator herself is there. Well wishes for you two.
And capture it you have. Something has changed in your writing. You have definitely lifted to a new level (if that were possible). This verse is exquisite in its detail and its beauty. Using the moonlight as a them for romance is a winning formula, but you make this look simple, though it certainly is anything but. Beautiful. SL
Hey Caroline...just for usual you had me captivated to the end...ironic isn't it...I write write with such negativity but admire this love and passion with such desire...as usual keep up the great work...Luv Jules...
Ah this is so dreamy and so beautiful BW...gave me a few shivers in the reading.smiles...the imagery is stunning and the flow to your words beautiful..i read it twice..and being an incurable romantic, i will definately read it over again....
Cradle me tight under blankets of rapture. i sooo love this line.....
Bravo my dear friend..How not to spotlight such beauty....smiles...DD.
Oh stop it BW,, you are such a romantic girl , next thing I know you will be saying your love travels across the galaxy on a star dust to discover new planets across the innermost recess of the meta galaxy and just for one kiss you deviated an asteroid from its collision course with earth. I know you BW, so I won't put that past you.
In The Moonlight... don't shining stars shine at brightest light when moon reflects their lover's glory? does not the sky seem a heaven alone? in need of love red lipstick streak like brush of hummingbird heart and phoenix wing. ~touchable love with golden string thread, unyielding. strong. secure. safe.
~sweet in the bright light, the sunshine, the dark fight - oh how this depicted love excites my own and my soul to the very stars themselves. i want to take trip around maze of galaxies from such beauty in love poem.
Intoxicated In The Moonlight.... oh bookworm, i lose thought train, perfume of intoxication lost me... where was i?