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COLD


Author: MagicMJ
Created: January 21, 2011 at 12:22 pm
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Entry Stats: 4.87 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments 127 views
COLD 
It's so freaking cold
I want something to hold
My hands are shaking
My inside is breaking

Does anyone care?
Would anyone dare?
Come closer to me
Feel what i wanted to be

Can you feel the chills?
In my bones it crawls
Gnawing my stillness
Killing me in silence

Would anyone care?
If I fucking dare
To lay so freaking dead
Alone in my bed...



Author Notes
hehehe... just my blahs after a break from writing....


 

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Comments & Reviews ( X 2)

stephen_werdna18
April 26, 2011

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This is a good poem Ate MJ. Very emotionally charged. I'll stop by more in your portfolio to check out your recent writings. The structure is solid and the message is direct and compact. Well done Ate
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benjamin006
January 29, 2011

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Dark and Coldhearted
Man, this poem is deep. Sometimes, I would feel that way in my bones. The raw and cold chills deep inside alone. But sometimes, when you think no one really cares. Think again, and your thoughts may be spared.
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paSSionsburn
January 21, 2011

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Love it!
I've missed your writes, and this one is awesome. I am physically coldfrom this weather, so i relate. keep writing! BW44
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MagicMJ
January 22, 2011
(Creator) 		thanks a biggie



sLeonard
January 21, 2011

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looool, i read the poem and thought 'thats really good, but very depressing!', then i read the authors notes, and was like 'Whaaaaat!' a great poem though, you have portrayed the persons emotions extremely well, and i think it is a little chilly... hmmm...
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MagicMJ
January 21, 2011
(Creator) 		thanks a lot






      

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