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A Poem by ThunderStorm


Author: ThunderStorm
Created: December 31, 2010 at 11:22 am
Upload Type: Poem, T (13+)  
Category: Horror | Dark | Gothic
Upload Stats: 4.37 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments and 176 views

Alone in the dark  


As the clock strikes midnight, I lay down on my bed turning left and right hoping any bad dreams.

Then I saw my heart rotating on a pitchfork, it slit like a razorblade blood gushing and gushing.

Needles have been pierce inside my heart, and then I made a run to get my heart back inside of my body.

I pick the needles out of my heart, and then I place my heart back inside of my body.

Then I found out my heart was going to die, then I suddenly got an idea if I transfer my own blood to my own heart.

I put a needle inside of my own vein, pumping with my rich Cherokee blood in my own heart.

I wake up shackled in chains, I test my strength to break these chains then I broke with my own spine.


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Comments & Reviews ( X 5)



Caroline
December 31, 2010
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Deep!
wow Thunder this is deep! It is a bit dark, but also very poetic. Happy New yr my friend! BW44


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brookie
December 31, 2010
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different...
You have some un-original language that you may want to work on, the cherokee blood doesnt really fit in with your poem eithier.... other than that it was a pretty good poem.


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KiTTiArrA
December 31, 2010
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Wow intense and a little morbid! Nice show of emotions thunder and with very vivid imagery Are you really cherokee? I have a thing for cherokee things...dream catchers especially Happy new years!



(Author)
Yes i am i have pure cherokee blood running through my veins

 ThunderStorm replied on December 31, 2010


OMG! *passes out* Can I marry you?!

 KiTTiArrA replied on December 31, 2010




MusicMyLife
December 31, 2010
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This is great. Well thought out, a well formed piece of writing..


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