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Alone in the dark


Author: ThunderStorm
Created: December 31, 2010 at 11:22 am
Entry Type: Poem, T (13+)
Category: Horror | Dark | Gothic
Entry Stats: 4.37 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments 150 views

Alone in the dark 

As the clock strikes midnight, I lay down on my bed turning left and right hoping any bad dreams.

Then I saw my heart rotating on a pitchfork, it slit like a razorblade blood gushing and gushing.

Needles have been pierce inside my heart, and then I made a run to get my heart back inside of my body.

I pick the needles out of my heart, and then I place my heart back inside of my body.

Then I found out my heart was going to die, then I suddenly got an idea if I transfer my own blood to my own heart.

I put a needle inside of my own vein, pumping with my rich Cherokee blood in my own heart.

I wake up shackled in chains, I test my strength to break these chains then I broke with my own spine.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 5)

Caroline
December 31, 2010

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Deep!
wow Thunder this is deep! It is a bit dark, but also very poetic. Happy New yr my friend! BW44

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brookie
December 31, 2010

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different...
You have some un-original language that you may want to work on, the cherokee blood doesnt really fit in with your poem eithier.... other than that it was a pretty good poem.

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KiTTiArrA
December 31, 2010

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Wow intense and a little morbid! Nice show of emotions thunder and with very vivid imagery Are you really cherokee? I have a thing for cherokee things...dream catchers especially Happy new years!


ThunderStorm
December 31, 2010
(Creator)
Yes i am i have pure cherokee blood running through my veins

KiTTiArrA
December 31, 2010
OMG! *passes out* Can I marry you?!



MusicMyLife
December 31, 2010

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This is great. Well thought out, a well formed piece of writing..

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