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Heart Failure

Author: ThunderStorm
Created: November 21, 2010 at 12:33 pm
Entry Type: Poem, T (13+)
Category: Death | Horror | Dark
Entry Stats: 4.41 Stars by 6 users with 6 comments 197 views
Heart Failure 
First you in love

Then you recognize your heart collapses

In the middle of the floor

Then blood starts trickling on your lucky shirt

Then your hands covered in blood trying safe your heart

But there is no hope tries to save your heart

But before your heart stops beating

You slowly fade away in the galaxy

Trying finding a way to find a donor who has a heart

To replaced all enteral bleeding


Author Notes
This Poem is to remember of my painful year in 2001


 

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Comments & Reviews ( X 5)

daydreamer1717
February 19, 2011

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Emotional
There are some grammatical errors, however, I like the idea here of a "bleeding heart" and fading away. Thanks for sharing and keep writing!
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paSSionsburn
November 24, 2010

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provocative
I have been meaning to read some of your work, and I am glad I did. This is outstanding. I love what you say about trying to find a way to find a donor who has a heart! beautiful!!
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TaylorSwiftFan22
November 21, 2010

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a good poem but there are some spelling errors. check back on those with your own eye.
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NatureBoy
November 21, 2010

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Your poems, I can imagine you sitting in the calm, reading poetry from a notebook, ominious and mysteriously. idk. I really like this, you tell a story in blunt words and sentences. Which doesnt work alot, but it works for you. I like the language you've made for youself.
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HerSpark
November 21, 2010

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i think you need to read it through again it doesn't always make sense. nice idea though. x ells
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kamranali
November 21, 2010

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As if written from your very own heart. Extremely good.
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