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A Poem by MagicMJ

Author: MagicMJ
Created: November 02, 2010 at 07:06 pm
Upload Type: Poem, T (13+)  
Category: Romance | Sad | General/Other
Upload Stats: 3.83 Stars by 3 users with 3 comments and 288 views

Darn Sorry  

It seems like forever
Since I hear you say
My sweet name
And the sweet words
That complete my day

I don't know why but i feel
I'm having my heart taken
I can't feel a single beat
My mind went into daze
My body felt numb

I know i shouldn't
There's no big reason
To feel worried
Maybe another attack
Of this damn paranoia

Did I do something wrong
Or just circumstances
Are not too friendly
I want to think clear
And see what's real

Darn, now I know it
I did something stupid
I again said sorry
After I called you dear
A thing you deeply hated

Please don't be mad
Speak sweet words again
My heart is getting sad
I want my dear back Registered & Protected

Last Modified: November 08, 2010 at 04:38 am
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Author Notes

My feelings right now...

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Comments & Reviews

November 05, 2010
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Expressed your feelings with emotions very well. Nice writing. Enjoyed reading it.

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November 03, 2010
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Good work
I love the emotion in this piece MJ. The one thing that takes away from it is the structure..breaking a sentence in certain places causes an awkward pause. Aside from that I enjoyed it.

hehehe... thanks...

 MagicMJ replied on November 03, 2010

November 03, 2010
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A great showing of who you are. I look forward to reading more. Good Work.

thanks a lot

 MagicMJ replied on November 03, 2010


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