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Darn Sorry


Author: MagicMJ
Created: November 02, 2010 at 07:06 pm
Entry Type: Poem, T (13+)
Category: Romance | Sad | General/Other
Entry Stats: 3.83 Stars by 3 users with 3 comments 108 views
Darn Sorry 
It seems like forever
Since I hear you say
My sweet name
And the sweet words
That complete my day

I don't know why but i feel
I'm having my heart taken
I can't feel a single beat
My mind went into daze
My body felt numb

I know i shouldn't
There's no big reason
To feel worried
Maybe another attack
Of this damn paranoia

Did I do something wrong
Or just circumstances
Are not too friendly
I want to think clear
And see what's real

Darn, now I know it
I did something stupid
I again said sorry
After I called you dear
A thing you deeply hated

Please don't be mad
Speak sweet words again
My heart is getting sad
I want my dear back

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Last Modified: November 08, 2010 at 04:38 am


Author Notes
My feelings right now...


 

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Comments & Reviews

gomsi
November 05, 2010

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Nice
Expressed your feelings with emotions very well. Nice writing. Enjoyed reading it.
-Gomsi.
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Shadows
November 03, 2010

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Good work
I love the emotion in this piece MJ. The one thing that takes away from it is the structure..breaking a sentence in certain places causes an awkward pause. Aside from that I enjoyed it.
 Additional Comments (1)

MagicMJ
November 03, 2010
(Creator) 		hehehe... thanks...



mr_badbehavior
November 03, 2010

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Personal.
A great showing of who you are. I look forward to reading more. Good Work.
 Additional Comments (1)

MagicMJ
November 03, 2010
(Creator) 		thanks a lot






      

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