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A Poem by ThunderStorm


Author: ThunderStorm
Created: October 01, 2010 at 05:27 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Free Verse | Free Verse | Free Verse
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 3 users with 3 comments and 218 views

Free verse with Gomsi and thunderstorm  

Gomsi and Thunderstormů


2 minds are Greater

2 geniuses hard at work

Writing a marvelous masterpiece

A teacher teaching a student how to write free verse

A brilliant teacher has taught the student well

A teacher has give the Student a Free verse diploma

The student hugs his favorite teacher

The Student and the teacher Loves Rock music


© ThunderStorm - all rights reserved


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Comments & Reviews ( X 3)



emeraldeyes
October 01, 2010
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Well Done TS
Hi Thunder. . . I really enjoyed this a lot. One suggestion. When you use numbers in a writing, I spell out the number. Two would be better than 2. I'm glad you and Gomsi are good friends. He's taught you well. Peace ! ee


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gomsi
October 01, 2010
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Great one. You have written it man. That's awesome. I really enjoyed it. You are really a great friend. I give you a hug too man. Great job.


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Rosaria
October 01, 2010
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Um it started out good and strong but the last verse was completely random. I'm not trying to say anything mean or any of that for the free verse was good but that last bit about rock music threw me off completely. Keep going but stay with the theme. XD



Good call, Rosaria.

 JoelPhillips replied on October 01, 2010




      

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