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Love without a Battles


Author: ThunderStorm
Created: September 06, 2010 at 01:13 pm
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Romance | Love | Sad
Entry Stats: 4.33 Stars by 3 users with 4 comments 262 views

Love without a Battles 
To see love without a battle, a war without no battles.

To see a poetry been written, by a poet writer.

See a lost soul for a shadow’s might, of the charisma building.

Or to see a long lost love, from high school to see her crying her own 2 eyes out.

It’s brings the joys and sorrows, for a long lost love of the world.

If you are the king of the tributes, you race to the final poem in your career.

To race your dreams is a sight beyond sight, to see the legendary pen.

Or a legendary sword of the kings, to boldly go where no poet has gone before.

To all my friends who stayed behind me 100%.

To Jon London kassandra pacific lion blackroseislove elfqueena deviant writer 88 dansonly dmph84 all of my other friends to guide me here to shed their tears for happiness.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 5)

DeviantWriter88
September 09, 2010

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Or a legendary sword of the kings, to boldly go where no poet has gone before - You my friend have achieved a level legendary and now knitted with the history, there is a King of Tributes who has won hearts and made days special for many writers in this haven called writers-network!

Awesome poem! Bro and will always be glad and honored to be on your side

Keep this legendary pen yours moving!!!

-Deviant Writer-

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Kassandra
September 06, 2010

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Oh how beautiful
your road to poetry's destination. I love this piece. You have a typo in the title an 'a' got in there but the poem is splendid and I adore it.
The pen is mightier than the sword is truly said. Thank you for sharing your journey here with your poetic family who all love you very much indeed.
Yours Kassie

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missladypink
September 06, 2010

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Very good but try using more expressive words or rather creative.

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HaveFaithx3
September 06, 2010

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Perhaps in the first line, it can say "To see love without a battle, a war without battles."?
What you have is a double negative, which is incorrect.

In line 5, it should say "It brings the joys nd sorrows, for a long lost love of the world."

Otherwise great job on this,


HaveFaithx3
September 06, 2010
That should say "It brings the joys and sorrows, for a long lost love of the world."

We all make mistakes!




      

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