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A Poem by MichelleR

Author: MichelleR
Created: August 11, 2010 at 08:47 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Personal | Drama | Opinion
Upload Stats: 4.7 Stars by 5 users with 5 comments and 250 views


trust, so hard to gain so easy to break
you gave me your word, i found out it was fake
stabbed me in the back straight threw to my heart
why couldn't i have seen this from the very start

i could have saved myself from this all this pain
i didn't need this , or deserve this. this is no gain
if it was your intention to make me hurt like this
congratulations it worked, check that of your list

all of the times you said " i promise" or "trust me"
i actually believed you, how proud you must be
but i don't care what you say anymore so what now
you cant hurt me anymore. that, i wont allow

no more lies i will believe, not for one second
and in my heart i know worse things have happened
at least one good thing came out of all of your lies
it made me stronger and wiser about all of you guys

your not worth it I'm better then this and every one agrees
you are so unworthy of any girl not even me
so go ahead and bask in your glory but just know
it doesn't last forever and soon it will show

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Comments & Reviews ( X 3)

September 04, 2010
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Great poem I enjoyed this one, too, your emotions are put in to this poem well. You are better than these kind of guys, that's for sure. Believe it not there are some good guys around, too, they're just harder to find. Good poem. Kind regards Dan

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August 13, 2010
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It achieved the intention. A direct, natural & simple piece. Easy to read- relaxed.

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August 12, 2010
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very good
i always think that personal poem is the hardest to write, this one is a very well written poem, full of flow and powerful emotion. i especially liked the concluding line, this is a very good conclusion one that i can only agree with. superbly written, throughly enjoyable write, well done

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August 11, 2010
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Has potential
I could feel the flow of your work, but unnecessary words threw off the reading of it a little bit. There were also some simple grammatical errors which can be fixed very easily. My only other thought is that here was some punctuation in your piece that makes the reader pause at strange times. Otherwise it is a very good piece of work! Hope that this helps you, and keep on writing!!!!

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August 11, 2010
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Good write
Ot's hard to get it back once you given it and it is broiken. Of course there id forgiveness and only you know if the person is worthy.

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