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Amoung the stars



Author: MichelleR
Created: August 11, 2010 at 08:23 pm
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Sad | Love | Personal
Entry Stats: 4.5 Stars by 5 users with 5 comments 136 views

Amoung the stars 
awoken to nothing she sits there alone
she can here the rain falling on the roof above her
thoughts rush threw her mind
memories that should be forgotten
he is gone she says . over and over
but it never gets easier
she tip toes down the hall
footsteps as quite as a mouse
as she turns the corner
she sees his things. things that
were important to him just like
he was to her. she takes a deep breath
and inhales every thing from that room
tears fill up in her eyes. she try's to
blink them back. so tired of crying
she picks up one of his belongings
and slowly brings it to her face.
its still soft and smells like him
just as if he wore it yesterday
she imagined his voice. his piercing blue eyes
as she pulled it away from her face she
then realized he wasn't coming back.
sniffling . she sighs. he is among
the stars now. but she knew that anytime
she missed him or the memories drifted away
all she would have to do is make a trip to
that small dusty room at the back of her
house that he loved so much. she crawled
back into bed and rapped herself in her favorite blanket
and slowly fell back into a soft sleep to the sound
of rain lightly pattering on the roof above her.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 3)

WranglerAkin
September 04, 2010

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powerfull
this poem shows true love and sadness it speaks in many volumes great ride my friend keep it up

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-Seo-
August 13, 2010

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A little more Stanza would MAKE this. have some repeating lines... like the rain on roof one. Loved it



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gareth
August 12, 2010

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again a very well crafted write well done keep it up am really enjoying reading your work.

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JohnRamos
August 12, 2010

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Very well written...Intense and personal .

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duke15908
August 11, 2010

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imagery
Imagery was tremendous. Now not only do you have a dusty room in the back of your house to remember him by, you have this poem. Well done!

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