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♥ -xOx- to collect memories-xOx- ♥

Author:   iviedoeloves
Created: July 29, 2010 at 12:40 am
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Romance | Love | Friendship
Entry Stats: 4.5 Stars by 2 users with 3 comments 298 views

-xOx- to collect memories-xOx- 
to collect memories

peek-a-boo, i see you
hello my lover, my friend.
simply compicated in a loving way.
but you know; it's just me again.

wrap your head around unwrapping me~
let's apply ourselves to some play!!
within a state of mild, kind acceptance.
light and simple for a day; come away.

horsing around with your Lover;
looks to be the wildest kind of 'cool'.
just take it to the wall, make a day of it.
dont deny me fun; causing me to be blue.

so, I'll let real time be the master of
when 'where' is; aslo how 'what' it shows~
all of this just to tell you are worth play time;
i love you dearly, for your smiles wiggle my toes!

ivie doe 2010
for jason fritz

Author Notes
fire away!!i'm still in lovey, love. but i coud always write better!!!

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October 31, 2010

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Peek a booo i luv you! Looks to be the wildest kind of cool that line is brillant glad i read this. This is a wonderful write

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September 02, 2010

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Amazing!!! I love reading your poetry its really great!!!!!

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July 29, 2010

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Great opening and final flourish and "the wildest kind of cool" is a line to be remembered. One aspect of this piece I found slightly confusing at first was that (it may be pre-coffee me) I was a little unsure whether you were addressing a young child or your lover, but then I guess on another level the two are interchangeable and therefore the same. I know you'll want to nuke the typos in lines 3 and 14. Thanks for the glow reading this piece gave me.

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