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A Poem by ThunderStorm

Author: ThunderStorm
Created: July 06, 2010 at 09:54 pm
Upload Type: Poem, T (13+)  
Category: Dark | Horror | Death
Upload Stats: 5 Stars by 4 users with 5 comments and 293 views

Gothic Thorns part 2  

As I walk to the valley of darkness, I begin to loose memory losses.

The vultures are circling around, like I am a piece of meat.

As I see the vultures raking my eyes, I see a man.

Dowsing my head with water, he took me in his home.

I feel welcome by a mere immortal, I was gasping for air in my lungs.

But then all suddenly, I can breathe inside deep underground.

As I see hooded figures, with torches they welcome with a sight.

Then Finally I see him the shadow figure, he saw my scars and wounds.

It was all cover in blood and needles, as I laid flat on my stomach he starts picking the needles from my back.

Then as I begin to heal my wounds, as I see short-term loss for blood.

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October 05, 2010
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awe babe this was awesome as usual , such a dark poem and kind of scary too. gothic like also . the theme is what i liked and I liked the line about the vultures , ugh they are really ugly creatures , but necessary, good job baby son ,

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October 05, 2010
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Still dark
This one felt a bit faster paced than the last part, but still as dark as ever. I didn't notice any immediate errors since I usually edit when reading, thanks for allowing me to read this. Take care.


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September 05, 2010
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perhaps I'am a Goth thats why I like this stuff nice written poetry I like it

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July 31, 2010
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okay... very interesting... and truly captivating...

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July 14, 2010
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Very Gothic
This piece has a strong nurture theme throughout that is really endearing at odds with a gothic poem yet fits well and solid here. Well done for pulling that off so well and the piece is extremely interesting.
Good work

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