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A Poem by ThunderStorm


Author: ThunderStorm
Created: July 03, 2010 at 06:07 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Romance | Love | Spiritual
Upload Stats: 4.62 Stars by 4 users with 8 comments and 195 views

Laughter of the girls  

In the bright of morning, I hear laughter from girls.

Girls playing jump rope, Mama watching them plays jump rope.

While she hanging the clothes, to dry she brings the girls lemonade.

Eating their lunch in the calm afternoon, their mama fixed them peanut butter and jelly sandwiches.

They laughed and smiled, while their mama take them to the lake.

Then after they swim, their mama took them to watch the fireworks.

The girls were very impressed, of the display of the fireworks.

It was a very impressive night; the girls love it so very much.

So when they got back they got in the bathtub, they clean nicely and scrub.

They prayed and for a good time, and their mama give them kisses and hugs.

They said I love you mama, and their mama smiled like a proud mama.

To ElfQueena This poem is for you


© ThunderStorm - all rights reserved


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Comments & Reviews ( X 5)



elfqueena
July 06, 2010
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Awe
Awe thank you so much babe this is so sweet I am crying you have made me so warm and feel so loved on here , now got to find a hankis . this is the nices thing everyone has ever done for me your like one of my kids , thank you doll I am so honored by this and such a sweet poem to I love it so much and it is so very touching, I just cant say enough . lov sharon


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Kassandra
July 05, 2010
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beautiful
How cute was this. Elf will adore this so much. Really enjoyed the imagery here and the innocence of a beautiful relaxing day. Well done my friend, Kassie


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stargazer123123
July 04, 2010
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GOod
Very Good i loved it Keep up the good work.


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aSamLoomis
July 03, 2010
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cute
I agree with another commenter who said something along the lines of it being an "aww" moment. You should proof-read, though, 'cause you have some strange grammatical errors. Besides that, simple and cute.


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MelWrites87
July 03, 2010
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The imagery in this is poem is very vivid and is successful in denoting your story--good job


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JonLondon
July 03, 2010
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Sharon will love this piece my friend...so full of life...you can't help but smile...keep up the fine tributes my friend...you bring many smiles to this site .... < see


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BladeFly002
July 03, 2010
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well dude. imma say this. Beautiful. not my favorite word but this deserves it. It doesn't rhyme but then i dont think all poetry should rhyme. Just my personal thoughts. elfqueena? lol. That cool dude.


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Drunn
July 03, 2010
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Cute
It is a good poem of a "awwww" moment. lol I like the simple language that you used. I wish I could use the language as skilled as you do. You can simplfy or blury as you wish..

Anyways. A great poem by a great poet...

PS: I cut half of a star because it was too cute. I am the dark person you know... : P


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