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A Poem by ThunderStorm


Author: ThunderStorm
Created: May 31, 2010 at 01:41 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Fantasy | Love | Mythology
Upload Stats: 4.96 Stars by 13 users with 15 comments and 336 views

Dragon's rider  

As I rode the mighty dragon of wind and thunder, I have the battle scars.

To prove myself loyalty, I am the lonely Dragon rider of thunder.

To see my brothers in the Wind, the wind has guided you to soar.

You fly wherever the wind takes you, My Sisters of the lighting.

You been summoned From the Storm Clouds, to see a thunderbolt.

I have seen the anger sky, turn into a blood shot color of red.

It brings a joy of Dragon cries, to see his fallen master.

Fall from the sky see the anger of a dragon, all in rage surrounding by pain.

The Wrath of a mythical Creature, the Rider will never be forgotten.

But the Dragon will have to use the Tears, and Roar in pain.

Seeing the Rider sent to the Heavens, We’ll never forget The Dragon’s rider.


© ThunderStorm - all rights reserved


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Comments & Reviews ( X 8)



tarantulla81
August 14, 2010
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very nice work. i enjoyed it


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moniqueblanchard
August 01, 2010
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WOW!!
WOOT!!WOOT!!


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BladeFly002
July 20, 2010
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eh dude. This reminded of a fantasy-battle ground. but kinda like the Calsh of the Titans movie. god-like beings going to war. Hell i loved it. Wish i could do these thigns in a fight
Eh but good man. i agree with the other.


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justice4all89
June 18, 2010
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Okay. this is interesting. It almost seems like an intro to a story though. Not all that poetic. I like the idea. You should write the story of this dragon rider. So, a few things I have an issue with in this poem:
1. As I rode the mighty dragon of wind and thunder, I have the battle scars.
this really makes no sense. It is really not a coherent thought. I think a better opening is a must...
2. I just do not follow it all the way through. I think you are speaking metaphorically, but I am not picking up exactly what you mean...
3. The wording is nice, but simplistic. Adjectives are fun to work with. Try them out more. some new and interesting words can really add a lot to a work.

Overall, I like this piece. However, it does have some work that needs done on it. Thank you for sharing and keep writing!!


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stabyripstabstab
June 13, 2010
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Dragonlisous
loved it. wish to buy it from you. i will give you a cookie for it. can has? point is i loved it. had nice rythem and your point flowed right through. ^_^


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PrinceOfPersia56
June 12, 2010
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: )
I love this, it has such good fantasy mythos in it! : ) This really makes me happy, I call my coven members my sisters of the light! You made me really happy with this, great job! : )


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Kassandra
June 06, 2010
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Oh I loved this
How many images this conjures. A really good write my friend keep up the good work, Kassie


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GABSTBOZ
June 05, 2010
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Absolutely Marvelous
My my Thunder, this is your best work and one of the best works I've read in a long time. All though, I have been away for awhile and not read your work in months, but I must say that I am pleased with your use of periods and apostrophes now. Makes for a treasure to read, and you do have many treasures in your writing portfolio here at w-n my friend. "Dragon's Rider" is truely a great write filled with wonderful metaphors. Excellent work.

Smiles
Gabs


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justashadow
June 03, 2010
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creative, good flow, nice work thunder


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Hannah92
June 02, 2010
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Great imagery and very well written. A highly enjoyable read....thank you for that


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DanaLynn
June 01, 2010
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Loved It.
I really enjoy the imagery that you bring to this poem. Well written!


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elfqueena
May 31, 2010
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awesome
very awesome poem here loved the subject and was so full of action and spirit love what you did with this , really nicely written and so full of life, loved it thanks for sharing this with us , its awesome


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RobinD
May 31, 2010
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Well Written
Great Job Thunder! I think this was written beautifully.. Thank you for sharing


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VAMPIREFREAK19
May 31, 2010
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i liked it thunder.... it was very good.... (: i enjoy all of your poems (: keep writing.... always send me them too if i am never on here (:


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Geode
May 31, 2010
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Brilliant
i like the spit lines and the rythm of it, but i will admit its mostly the subject that i enjoy

Geode

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