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Gothic Thorns


Author: ThunderStorm
Created: May 04, 2010 at 06:33 pm
Entry Type: Poem, T (13+)
Category: Horror | Death | Despair
Entry Stats: 4.93 Stars by 8 users with 8 comments 244 views

Gothic Thorns 
As I walk to the impassion fuel by the Greediness, I lay down on the barbed wire awaiting for them to pierce my dying flesh, I want to Burn my Charring Flesh and Bones, Crush your own bones like baby powder As I See the agonized pain of Defeat, The Thorns is already starting to Dripping the blood of a Red marker it almost feels like a Bull-whip whipping My Deadly skin, I want my exoskeleton in a body bag so I can have a Brand new Exoskeleton. So I can see the ghouls eating the Flesh pieces, watching them eating my Charred Heart, then letting the leeches consumed my arms or letting the morgue Tear my arms like a Can opener,
Then bake my Arms in the Cremation oven till it the entire skeleton smells good, the planning Stage is just only to Begin of so many ways you take a Suffering pills then drown, yourself in a 12 degrees swimming pool.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 5)

clowen
October 05, 2010

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Dark
This was really dark i'm not sure about this, but I did notice two flaws 'The Thorns is already starting to Dripping the blood' thought it should be 'The Thorns are already starting to Drip the blood'. Other than that deliciously dark. Thanks for allowing me to read.

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MagicMJ
July 31, 2010

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wow... this is truly dark and vividly described....
I kinda feel the pain... I felt tortured...
great imagination... lol....

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BladeFly002
July 20, 2010

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damn dude, vicious. I'd hate to be tortured in this way. I think i'd go for the good ol bullet instead of this. Brutal, bloody, and vicious. Eh man, is good bro. I was a bit surprised at how it was written. not what most do. but difference is better than people doing the same thing over and over

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carmurr
June 19, 2010

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Wow
I don't quite know what to say about this write. It certainly was dark. You were right about that. It's almost creepy, but it's very descriptive and well written. carmurr

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DeviantWriter88
May 06, 2010

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Dark! Grotesque piece! There is pain due to greed there is defeat in pain. More so feels like I'm in hell punished for the greed and now the defeat of myself gives me pain! Nice work dude!

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Retto
May 06, 2010

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evil to the core lol
or maybe the word im looking for is torturous? lol either way, it is action-packed with white-hot passion good write storm, i would expect nothing less of ya ^_^

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elfqueena
May 05, 2010

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awesome dude
well what can I say , was a very dark poem , but had a lot of good points in it and even some weird ones too, but kinda liked this one, had loads of feelings in it . I mean weird feelings lol it was a gruelsome poem , scary , and as that is the effect you were going for you suceeded lol good job babe

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carl-ray
May 04, 2010

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spotlight
this story touched my heart

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