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Thu Sep 25 13:24:03 2008
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Thu Sep 25 13:21:12 2008
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melissa
Tue Sep 23 21:21:19 2008
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melissa
Tue Sep 23 21:19:45 2008
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melissa
Tue Sep 23 21:13:13 2008
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| My Review of (Ja_B) To the one who knows by
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| Wow this is really well done, I can so relate to this piece. I have gone through this type of "love" in the past.... but I'm truly grateful for this piece. Very well done. |
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melissa
Tue Sep 23 21:09:30 2008
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| My Review of (Ja_B) My Music by
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| Really loved this piece, wonderfully written. You have defined your love for music in a very pleasant way, with "not too much or too little" of words. Well done. Love the simplicity. |
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melissa
Thu Jul 24 10:10:05 2008
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| My Review of Shadowed love by
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| Maybe alittle short, you could elaborate on your feelings alittle more. You can't quite feel the depth of your feelings with the so little words that you use. I think you could add some more to this piece, but other than that I enjoyed. |
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melissa
Mon Jul 14 09:23:47 2008
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Mon Jul 14 08:57:31 2008
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| My Review of Sad Girl by
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| Wonderful use of words, and great description. You have a few grammar errors though I would check that out and revise. |
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melissa
Sun Jul 13 23:41:38 2008
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Fri Jul 4 11:58:29 2008
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| My Review of Disappointed by
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| You can defenitly feel the emotions you are dealing with in this piece, I can defenitly feel the disapointment as well. Very strong, and very powerful. I would remove the paragraph " and she's gone away ..." as I believe you don't need to repeat it so many times, I think you should use that paragraphy only once in this piece. |
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melissa
Fri Jul 4 11:45:47 2008
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| My Review of " I Sit Away " by
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| This one is really deep, I love how you've managed to say so much with so little words. I'm really impressed. I love it. |
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melissa
Fri Jul 4 11:42:22 2008
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Wed Jul 2 18:41:56 2008
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melissa
Tue Jul 1 00:10:14 2008
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Thu Jun 26 12:08:09 2008
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| My Review of Your Illusions by
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| Great way of expressing your hurt, this speaks with alot of emotions I like that , but I would maybe change the last line as the words that you use are kind of powerless and don't really match up with the stlye of the rest of it. |
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melissa
Thu Jun 26 12:02:53 2008
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| My Review of THIS IS ME!!! by
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| I really liked this, it's brief but it says alot. It's uplifting, great way of expressing who you are, and your love for poetry. |
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melissa
Thu Jun 26 11:59:16 2008
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| My Review of Remember This!! by
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| Enjoyed it I like that it conveys a powerful message with so little words only thing is I think you could of ended it alittle different. I find the words used in the last two sentences are almost powerless compared to the rest. |
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melissa
Sat Jun 21 14:45:02 2008
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| My Review of Thank You Mom!! by
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| Great work, it's short but yet it still says alot. I really like this a great tribute. |
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melissa
Sat Jun 21 12:15:33 2008
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| My Review of Mother by
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| This is defenitly a lovely tribute to a mother but I feel as though their is not enough being said when you can say so much. I think you need to add some more verses, I don't think the reader gets to feel the appreciation that one has for a mother. |
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melissa
Thu Jun 19 11:52:14 2008
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Sun Jun 15 12:19:44 2008
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| My Review of (Ja_B) One Star by
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Great write! You took the words right out of my mouth, I feel the same way as you do. Thanks for your empowering words I'm sure that everyone else who has been dissed
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melissa
Thu Jun 12 12:02:10 2008
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