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jonni-inferno
Sun Apr 9 23:14:05 2017

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My Review of JULIET TO ROMEO by kitty
great write Kitty !!
could use a tweak or two

specially this bit of line
"to sing some more"
I would change it like this: "to sing more"
that line would flow much better
enjoyed this !!

ALL the best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Sat Mar 4 00:04:46 2017

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My Review of How the Rainbow Fell (repost) by SketerMichaels
great story

wow - that's a lot to take in
this is powerfully written -
a dire warning -

tragically -
too many are deaf -
and willfully do not listen
they blind themselves with lies -
unable to see what is easily seen
unfortunately - they are not dumb -
as they seem to say/yell/scream a lot -
cursing and parroting lies -

their mouths are moving -
and their ears are closed
Enjoyed This Work.

ALL the Best
jonni



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jonni-inferno
Fri Mar 3 23:47:19 2017

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My Review of Hearts by JohnCreekmore
terrific write !!

well written !!

put another way -
"nobody knows what it's like - to be the bad man"

too many fail to empathize
perhaps not knowing how
perhaps not caring to even try

thanks for putting "pen to paper" - as it were

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Fri Mar 3 23:40:47 2017

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My Review of Beginnings and Endings by JohnCreekmore
great heaartfelt write
aye -
too often we take for granted
that which we hold most dear

appreciate you expressing this
thought so eloquently

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Fri Mar 3 23:35:26 2017

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My Review of Flat Screen Opiates by odinroark
too true

and yes -
getting harder to find really good new programming
TCM - has some good oldies - if you can catch them

nice write - but you left out
"but wait - don't answer" =P



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jonni-inferno
Sat Jan 14 16:27:11 2017

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My Review of Between Heart, Mind, You & Me by NishA
wow - heart wrenching
but true..

very well written
many heart truths revealed

"Even when our mind knows better
Our heart's are willing to believe
Why are Hearts so naive"

NOTE:
10th Stanza \ Last Line
abide or aside ?

(spotlight)

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Sat Jan 14 16:16:17 2017

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My Review of 516. by Profanisaurus
shattered and scattered
Those Damn Orcs
Glad the good guys won !!
Good Read Prof.

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Fri Jan 13 19:51:23 2017

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My Review of ~The Door~ by TheSnowdog
excellent write
wow - nice work Rob.

Long poems
i do not mind
if in reading
i may find
a jewel
a nugget
worth the time

and yours had many

ALL the Best
jonni



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jonni-inferno
Wed Jan 11 20:03:49 2017

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My Review of Forlornness by Littlesong
aye lass...
aye - it hurts to be alone

i hope this is just a poem
and not what you are going thru...

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Wed Jan 11 19:56:38 2017

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My Review of Merry Go Round by Silverblue
nice write !!
enjoyed this read very much
these pearls of wisdom
dripping from your pen

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Wed Jan 11 19:47:41 2017

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My Review of To staff at writers network by Northern_Lass
had the same issue
had the same issue when i first signed up
and i signed up for the Pro Upgrade
right off the bat
and - nothing
so - i did what you did - sort of =P
for details
see my poem - "Wherefore Art Thou Pro Upgrade"

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jonni-inferno
Wed Jan 11 19:41:22 2017

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My Review of 515. Rise Of The Orcs by Profanisaurus
too short
hey - where's the rest of the story !!??

okay - so - i'll see your Orcs and
raise an army of knights
see my - "Thru Deepeste Nyghte"
Check-Mate =P

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Tue Jan 10 20:37:02 2017

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My Review of Of A Dream by SimpleReBirth
ouch - that hurts
many of us feel this way
or have felt this way
some have escaped
and found their true love
all i can say is
Never Give Up

ALL the Best
jonni

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jonni-inferno
Tue Jan 10 20:27:03 2017

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My Review of Oh That Stormy Night by Archia
LOL
loved the way the "narrator" rambled on and on
and kept interrupting the story
the narrator was definitely the star of the show

"rewind" and "backwards sentences" - too cool

nice write -
you could clean it up a bit
but it's not necessary

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Tue Jan 10 20:05:49 2017

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My Review of Echoes by Archia
hah - nice story !!
wonder where you find these gems ?
hiding in the shadows ?
buried in a chest in the sand ?
flickering in the starlight ?

I keep saying to myself
"this is the last poem i will read of hers - tonight"
but then -
i look to see what other titles
that you have listed on your page
and boom -
i'm hooked again
and no
there is no
"catch and release"
not for me
i gotta read it
ALL the way thru
THANKS Leah !! =P

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Tue Jan 10 19:52:34 2017

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My Review of Sunshine at the World's End by Archia
nice write !!
umm - so, let me get this straight -
You're telling us that
The Light at the End of Tunnel
Was Not a Train ? =P

Love the way your story began
and ended

ALL the Best
jonni



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jonni-inferno
Tue Jan 10 19:41:13 2017

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My Review of Aggressive Shadows by Archia
great story !!
couple of grammatical glitches and missed word
or two - fix it up and it's perfect.
i.e. - I hate to be the one to day this to you.

very much enjoyed reading this story
we all have hangups -
we are
our very own worst critics
we see
and know our every fault

the world only sees us
thru a glass
darkly

if only we could learn
to see ourselves
and each other
as God sees us...

ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Tue Jan 10 19:22:47 2017

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My Review of The Alabaster Woman by Archia
Nice write
FYI - i do not mind reading an essay attached to a good story
so, there we have it -
a good story and a good essay to boot =P

Keep pen to paper and let your stories unfold

ALL the Best
jonni



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jonni-inferno
Tue Jan 10 08:26:38 2017

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My Review of Power by JohnCreekmore
"powerfully" written
intense write and very true
but -
doesn't everyone like dragons ??
green, red and blue ?
especially the young...

ALL the Best
jonni



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jonni-inferno
Tue Jan 10 08:18:35 2017

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My Review of MISTY BLUE by kitty
Well Penned !!
good meter and flow
great topic and imagery
first & second stanza were my favorites

ALL the Best
jonni

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jonni-inferno
Fri Dec 23 15:59:34 2016

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My Review of To Reach Beyond The Stars by Aspiring_Angel3
Beutiful
Nicely penned - perhaps a tweak or two to smooth the flow
Other than that - inspiring write

Thank you , for a great read

All the best
John I


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jonni-inferno
Wed Dec 21 19:55:15 2016

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My Review of 15 Word Poem by augustrush
wisdom
how true and how very sad
that - without death
we should love
so much less


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jonni-inferno
Wed Dec 21 19:45:48 2016

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My Review of Mozart in my ear by johnhenry
terrific write !!
perfect rhyme and meter - great subject
you painted a perfect picture

Thanks !!

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jonni-inferno
Tue Dec 20 16:02:39 2016

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My Review of Out There In The Vastness by johnhenry
great story
enjoyed the read - thank you for this.
cant be critical of a work penned so well
great flow all the way thru

Here is our star - with a smiley face - from NASA
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ALL the Best
jonni


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jonni-inferno
Tue Dec 20 15:53:39 2016

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My Review of Can't Let You In by RachelMurray
relatable pen
good emotive write, could use a tweak or two just to help with the flow.

Some advice from a great poet: Lord Alfred Tenneyson
In Memoriam A.H.H. - Canto 27
I hold it true, whate'er befall;
I feel it when I sorrow most;
'Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all.

I know this one thing to be true - you may love and suffer loss
but you can and will recover - and learn again - to love another.

ALL the Best
jonni



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