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Darkness17Slayer
Wed Mar 14 09:22:55 2018

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My Review of Sorry old Bird by matelotrod
Feathers of Angels
Well done. This is a well written piece, with great choice of words and a perfect flow. By your wisdom and knowledge, have you created a short story with significant values. 'Always take care of your flock of birds, as when the enemy is to arrive, they cannot fight back on an empty stomach. The birds will always be loyal to their master, which is why they planned to retaliate on the birds of the night; as they were of the day.'

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Darkness17Slayer
Wed Mar 14 08:44:40 2018

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My Review of The Prisoner by Zimena
Love for all
Thank you for sharing this writing piece. You have written it extremely well, as it had reminded me off my brothers in prison. Good choice of words, with a nice flow, allowing the readers to envision the whole piece in picture. May God bless all prisoners. For their acts are evil, but them as an individual are not.

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Darkness17Slayer
Wed Mar 14 08:33:42 2018

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My Review of Lost by michaelgallatin
Nice Writing Piece
You're not lost Michael. If you are lost, then we are all lost. In this world, we all have come to the point of giving up. It is in human nature, to allow emotion to take control of the mind. You have a beautiful heart, without you realizing it. Do not turn your eyes to what the world defines you as. Although at times we may feel lost, moments later we can finally see through the telescope again, that life had given us. 'In order to realize how truly beautiful heaven is, we must go through hell first.'
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Darkness17Slayer
Wed Mar 14 08:14:08 2018

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My Review of With My First World Cross by lyrycsyntyme
Well Done
Well done. This writing piece is the light of the world. The flow of your writing piece is filled with victory, alongside with perfect love. You have a story to tell, and a great one. Continue writing as the light, and never get discouraged by the darkness of this world. Always reside in love and peace, just as you are doing, and you will be rewarded. For the gifts of heaven makes one wealthy; In mind, spirit, and heart. If you are to carry the burdens of others, know in truth, you were created of God.

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Darkness17Slayer
Wed Mar 14 08:03:04 2018

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My Review of Valentines revolution by ErikTyni
Love
This writing piece is well written. By the choice of words, a flow of pain and sadness can be felt, coming forth from the heart. Thank you for sharing your story with us. It is a beautiful writing piece, and your voice has been heard. Love is patient, love is kind. If you are to continue your faith in love, with the loyalty of a good soldier as you are, you will be rewarded.
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Darkness17Slayer
Wed Mar 14 07:48:41 2018

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My Review of A New Life by matelotrod
Heart Felt
By your simple yet, strong words, the spirit of your writing piece can be felt by most viewers. You have lived a hard life, but have grown in so much wisdom and understanding. It is true as we get older, that we lose faith in the world, as we have seen so much agony in the heart of mankind. Nevertheless, you are blessed. Your wife loves you; all you need is patience to see love's victory. Though the husband suffers in the darkness, the wife will return as the morning light.
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Darkness17Slayer
Wed Mar 14 07:28:43 2018

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My Review of Heartbeats to heartbeats by Princesslove
Union
There is beauty in this writing piece, as it shows the union between man & woman. Also known as, husband and wife. Your writing piece expresses love in the most perfect way; as when the calling of the heart is heard by the other, you know in the matter of truth, that forever had just been created. When the two of you were to share your wisdom in love upon another, the world was confused, as they could not see through your binoculars. Keep up the good work, and continue writing in the spirit of love. For love never fails.
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Darkness17Slayer
Sat Feb 17 23:50:48 2018

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My Review of I Know I Am Alive by babyboomer68
Well Done
This is a short writing piece, but has enough definition for its readers to imagine a story. By your great and simple words, a beautiful picture is painted into the minds of many. I can see 'The Glory of the Sun' when I read your writing piece, and it brings me great joy; as the story of the sun is short and simple, but the purpose of the sun; gives story's to entire humanity. Keep up your great work, and continue writing as the light.
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Darkness17Slayer
Fri Jan 19 15:28:29 2018

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My Review of Who Is This Man? by joefrederick
Inspirational
This poem is very intriguing, and has been well written. You need not be confused, as you were led by the spirit to write it. By reading your story, I have understood that you have a good heart. The reason why the flow of your poem is different, is because it's unique. The Lord Jesus knew the world, but the world knew Him not. The reason why people feel guilt, is because they opposed and went against God. Their Creator. The One who gave them life. But God is Love, and is Merciful. As long as deep in our hearts we love Him, and pray to Him for forgiveness. Otherwise, they will be cursed. To rebel against Jesus, is to rebel against love, meaning you belong to the Adversary. If it were up to us, we would have annihilated Pilate and the Jews who rebelled. Unfortunately, that's not what Jesus stood for. Love comes first, then forgiveness. If people do not repent, then the last step is punishment.
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Darkness17Slayer
Fri Jan 19 14:56:46 2018

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My Review of Words Left Unsaid by gun2head
Well Written
This is a very beautiful poem, spoken by a good heart. By your choice of words and explanation of the situation, people would understand your pain and hear your voice loud and clearly. You have written your poem very well, as I feel compassion for you. You are correct in your last verse. Although words are powerful, and may fix relationships, we also have to take that extra step. Saying I love you will not stop the storm from approaching anymore. We must fight against the disasters and tragedies in life now. True victory comes from courage. 'I will tell you I love you, and then I will wait for you to prove it's true...'

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Darkness17Slayer
Fri Jan 19 13:39:17 2018

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My Review of The thing i lost by angelheart
Love
This is a very nice poem. By the specific words you use, and the layout of your poem by rhythm, I can see that you have spoken it from the deepness of your heart. While you were writing it, you may have been in a trance. A trance of love, which is beautiful because your love is genuine. You have a very kind heart, and the world would be at peace, if everyone saw things the way that you do. Unfortunately, this world is cruel, and have love for violence rather than fellow men. Keep up the faith, and never stop loving. You will be rewarded if you never lose faith in love.
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Darkness17Slayer
Fri Jan 19 13:24:29 2018

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My Review of God “Bless” the Troops by OIFPoet
Victory
Thank you for sharing this writing piece. It's not often we meet somebody who has fought a holy war. God only blesses and protect people who are fighting for Him, and not their own egos. The correct term, which is written in your writing piece, is "Yahweh have mercy" You're LT is on the correct path, for he prays to the One and Only God. Keep up your good work, and keep on fighting for righteousness. If you ever you may need assistance in fighting for Yahweh, also known as "Jehovah" please do not hesitate to inbox me.
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Darkness17Slayer
Fri Jan 19 13:11:02 2018

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My Review of God Thank You by BeautifulHotGirl
Happiness
It is very kind of you, to post a writing piece Thanking God. You are very courteous, which is a very beautiful quality, to have in character. For thus saith the Lord, 'You are welcome my daughter. I will be with you wherever you may go. When you are to speak, I will hear you. When you are to mourn, I will comfort you. When you are to be afraid, I will protect you.' Just one word of advice my sister. God is spelt with a capital G, not g. Keep up your genuine faith, and keep on thanking God. For the Lord is pleased, when we are to give him thanks for everything we receive in life. For all things come from God.
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Darkness17Slayer
Fri Jan 19 08:12:29 2018

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My Review of Poetry Isnt Dead by PoetGLG123
Well Done
This poem is very influential, and may connect with many viewers. For we all have an understanding of the world, in different perspectives. Little did we know, we all see the same picture, only spoken by different words and told by different stories. I can connect with your words, as I feel you are a person who takes a stand alone, because no one feels the pain that you feel. Nevertheless, do not doubt, for there are many good people who would love to fight alongside for you.

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Darkness17Slayer
Fri Jan 19 07:59:06 2018

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My Review of Time To Kill by michaelgallatin
Very Interesting Piece
By the words of your voice, by the rhythm of your dark verses, clarity can been seen in your character. Humanity is blessed with light and darkness, and it is our choice which side we wish to cross paths with. Nevertheless, both paths lead to greatness. For the light cannot reside without the darkness, and the darkness cannot reside without the light. This poem is provoked by darkness, but it does not mean it is not beautiful. For you have placed your heart into writing this poem, and it's outcome resulted in being viewed by many. Keep up the rhythm flow, for your flow has talent.
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Darkness17Slayer
Fri Oct 14 05:50:36 2016

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My Review of Till by Northern_Lass
Union
This is a beautiful poem, as it speaks of union, a bond that cannot be broken. The pen used to write the melody of this poem was written by the heart, and its voice is beautiful. Love conquers all, and there is no greater love than the art of bondship, which is expressed in your poem. Nothing in this world can ever separate true friendship.
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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 12:33:29 2016

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My Review of
Rise With Me
by Littlesong
True love
This is a very unique piece, beautiful in every way, because it defines love at a higher level. The choice of words you used has been picked extremely well with a great flow of rythm. It allows me to have a deeper view about love, understanding how uniting between a man and a woman with genuine love, falling for each other with a great vision would really feel. I can feel the emotions in this poem and it is indeed powerful with love. You wrote it extremely well, with a great understanding of how it feels to be in love. Well done <3

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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 11:52:24 2016

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My Review of Unstoppable by ManyRivers
Incredible
This is a master piece, very well written and spoken from a courageous heart. You wrote it with a strong will and your message is indeed very powerful and also inspiring. A well built foundation of your structure, and most can learn from this by understanding what it means to take a stand for the truth and not allow themselve to get manipulated by the enemy. I am very well pleased to hear that you will take a stand for the truth, justice and what is right. You are strong and courageous, and if there were more people like you in the world, together we could stop the common enemy such as world leaders who are puppets to an even more evil being. But your right, always forgive as God has taught me, but at the same time they have to repent.

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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 06:17:06 2016

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My Review of The Devil's Will by bickerstaffe
This piece is interesting. It shows some of the characteristics of the devil by the way you have explained it, in the form of poetry. Your words were written well to serve the head of the force of evil. The devil is indeed cunning, in his ways of manipulation and deception. A powerful angel indeed, but will meet with me in due date, so that I may fulfill the task given to me by God.
A well written piece, I felt the flow of your pen written by a dark ink with a good choice of structure.
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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 06:00:59 2016

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My Review of You by SilenceandSolace
Short but enough to under
I can understand that when you wrote this you wrote it with a solid bold pen. You used your words very well, simple and yet extremely powerful. In a relationship, it is not healthy to lie. It's hard to earn trust when someone is a liar, which is why I can understand why your upset. Some people find it hard to care for others aswell. You deserve care from that person because love is all about truth and care for each other. Well written piece, it gives a strong vibe, and it can connect with others as well, because it was written strongly. I pray that you may get what you deserve, and that the truth will put the broken pieces back together.
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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 05:42:58 2016

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My Review of JESUS (EASTER POEM) by seriouspoet
Truth
Beautiful but sad poem. What the world done to Jesus we will never forget. This crooked world opposed God and yet God still forgave them. People need to understand the ultimate sacrifice in which Jesus had done, because without it, we all would have perished. I felt the heart of your writing as you showed the beauty and glory of God, by Jesus going through hell and yet still continueing to love us unconditionally and blessing us with eternal life and the forgiveness of sin. You wrote it with your heart, and the Lord is pleased unto hearing it because you love Him. Well thought, well written, and well spoken, as we all need a reminder with what Jesus has done for us.
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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 05:24:55 2016

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My Review of Point of Views by Philthy
Great piece
I am glad to hear you are an independent thinker. You have escaped the corruptions and deceptions in this world by not allowing yourself to get manipulated like some unfortunate others. Well done, and keep up the good work. Keep on writing, your poetry is good and not only are you expressing yourself by writing poetry, you are sending a message by taking your stand which is very pleasing.
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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 05:13:16 2016

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My Review of Age of Angels by Abra
Faith in God's loyal ange

Your angel is sent by God to protect you from the bad things in life. Invisible creatures, but extremely powerful. It's great you feel your angel's presence, its her way of saying 'I'm here'. You are truly blessed, because not everyone is assigned an angel to protect. Beautiful writing piece, you wrote it extremely well as to give me a clear picture in my head about your story. Sounds like you and your angel have a fun yet comfortable relationship <3
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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 04:52:40 2016

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My Review of A Gift Received, A Gift Offered by ShaSha
Good Experience
Our Father in heaven feeds the birds of the air. Its good to hear that you followed the voice and your instincts, as this is how God communicates with us. You have faith in God which is pleasing to hear, and this must of been a great experience for you because you know God is listening. Keep up the good work with communicating to God and Jesus and continue to have faith with following your instincts.
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Darkness17Slayer
Sun Apr 24 04:35:33 2016

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My Review of Her Story. by Pankti
Love
I can understand how you feel. It's hard to say, but some people in this world cannot see things through the way we do. You loved him, cared for him, nourished him, and his heart did not appreciate it by the way he treated you. But just know, your capable of showing love and you mean it by your actions with the deeds you done. Some people on the other hand, just use sweet words but their actions never show their words. So please, feel proud that your capable of loving from the heart, and not with just the mind by sweet words. People showing genuine love in this world is rare, so I applaud you for standing your ground by continueing to love. Don't believe in faithless love. Believe in what is true, by meeting someone who makes you happy and at peace, not hurt or sad.
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